wow...im not a fan of the couple...a freind told me of this...this has to be my favorite fic eventhough im more for graphic stories this one actually made me kinda sad lol..but really i loved it continue it please?..well i gotta go feed the phone monkeys otherwise theyl kill me with a wooden spoon (not pretty)

good so far but if its gonna be a piccolo/chichi fic i will stop reading cuz ima die-hard g/cc fan also why does she have to cut herself is she crazy or somethin? update soon

I think this story's nice, but is Chichi cutting herself to relieve some pain from Goku's absence. I seen this on a episode on TV before. This story is a bit confusing and there are some errors. But still, nice story. Update soon.

not bad but you have too many run-on sentences. and grammatical errors. It was difficult TO read but it was A good read. I have a friend who used to cut herself, and her boyfriend's cutting and of course she wants to share others' pain so she'll probably start again. I know how frustrating it can be to have to watch those people, once I cut and actually enjoyed it. I used to have strong urges to do it again but that scared me so I always managed to keep myself from doing it.

This is a great story. plz put more up asap!

Will the story is good, but it could be better if you just take your time and do it when you can..
Don't get mad but i think you could do a lot better..
Please keep writing it.
Bye

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Well this story is certainly intresting. I think you did a good job on it. How old is Gohan and Chi Chi in here? I have a question though, why did Chi Chi ask Piccolo for her clothes, did each hour they left her alone, they let her go naked, or take her clothes away or something? That's the only part I didn't exactly get, but the rest was pretty good. I'm quessing this happened after Cell right? Well, nice story, update soon, gtg, ja'ne

i think that this is really good and i think that you should carry on, real soon