Very good! :3

~Miko

Huh, interesting.

~Miko

Very well written once more.

~Miko

It was longer, which is good, and had much more detail. One of your best chapters here.

~Miko

Hm. A lot better in this one, but the plot is moving rather slowly. Kind of dragged.

~Miko

Hm, more detailed, but still lacking a bit. The conversation is quick. You could drag it on for a little bit longer. Also, try combining a few chapters to make them longer and have less chapters so the story isn't intimidating to readers.

~Miko

Well, thi one lacked detail just a bit, but you can still get the point across. It is stillr eally short though.

~MIko

A short chapter, but very descriptive. I wonder what the significance is of the broken blade?

~Miko

Hm..What an interesting beginning.

~Miko

wow...got me stunned...brill fic...:)!!

that was a cool and fun story to read!! i love it!! i love ss pairing go tham !! yeah!!

i LOVED THAT EVEN if it was short it was still awesome. Please keep writing stories because Jessie is here to read them.
Ur fan and reader Jessie

this was great. please keep up the good work. hope you will continue to keep writing fics as good as this one.

Great Story. I really like the whole story. I don't think I will read that Love Hina story, but I might. I will think about it.
~*~Ngoc1231~*~

hey this story is really great although i only caught up in this chappie. i really think u should write a seqel to this but then it wouldnt work with the Epilogue and all so ... keep writing!! ^__^