hey! I LOVE IT! WOW! it has been a while since I didn't read a good story and I'm so glad that I found youre story! I really love it and I REALLY want you to continue, so please, keep writing this fic! see ya in your next chapter!

Note: sorry if there are mistakes, english is not my born lenguage, so, I'm sorry, hope you understand.

This is really good, I liked the way you showed the ... connection between Squall and Seifer. I look forward to reading the next book soon.

YAY!
me likey...
damn, i REALLY need that game...
well, maybe my parents'll buy it for me for my birthday...
...which is in two days...
*sighs*

whoo...
so it WAS time compression...
*sighs*
i really need to get that game...

whoo...
everything's screwed up in Seifer's mind...
or is that just some time compression going on?

the machine-thing wasn't destroyed, only defeated, right?
*sighs*
why is nothing ever easy?

something bad is going to happen to Seifer because of this... isn't it?

cool...
...wait, shouldn't a dragon control FIRE?!

EEK!
SEIFER!!
YOU'D BETTER NOT KILL HIM!
...
oh, wait... this is story one in a four-story sieries about the two...
heh...
-.-'

WHERE THE HELL DID SQUALL GO?!?!?!
...
sorry...

YOU EVIL PERSON!
a cliffhanger... how mean...
hmm... i need to do that sometime...
weel, ok, you're not that evil, because you posted the entire story at once, but STILL...)

*whew!*
Squall isn't a vampire!!
(lol)
cool - he's a sorcerer!
(tho for some reason, the yellow eyes make me think of Leon - the first time i ever met Squall was in Kingdom hearts, where he calls himself Leon. brobably because the heartless have yellow eyes...)

WHAT'S UNDER GRIEVER?!?!?!?!
HE'S A VAMPIRE!
A!
(7 "A"s don't you just HATE it when FFNet cuts letters out?)
lol... i no he's not a vampire...
O.O
is rinoa the sorceress?

o...
(that's 13 "o"s)

Dude, you call the annoying spider-bot X-ATMOS, too? 'Cause that's how I pronounce it in my head & I thought it was just me. Cool. Sorry, just had to comment.
Great story, by the way.