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RIP: Marc Lawrence aka Kloppman
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RIP: Dominic Lucero aka Bumlets

Hmm... you have definate potential but I would barely call this a story. It has a grand total of 208 words and no discernable plot or point. A truely good story needs substance and this really doesn't ha any. You should elaborate on all Kloppman's done for her and the other newsies. And wouldn't it work better if on of the origional boys was narrating. Readers prefer to hear about characters they know and love then one they have never heard of before.
If you're set on your character narrating make sure it isn't a Mary Sue (annoyingly perfect female character) Judging from the angsty past, excessive accent, and status as both a newsgirl and relative of Spot Conlon Diamond fits right into there. Don't worry, a little tweaking around will fix her up. I sugjest and Mary Sue Litmus Test to help you determine her Sueness.
You shouldn't use an accent in the narrative and I'd even tone it down in the dialogue as well. It important that readers can understand what is happening.
Good luck with future writing
~Flare (we seem to have the same NN. o.O)