Hello! I have been slowly making my way through your story, ad i have found a number of qualities about it that i admire and enjoy. Your writing style is wonderful, with lots of elegant and descriptive language, and unusual words that fit perfectly in the places you use them. I had never heard of "muggy" until reading this story, nor "dessicated", and in my opinion having all these words that say exactly what you mean them to and yet are strange and unusual enough to still feel impressive and imaginative are an absolutely wonderful addition. Your plot line is also intriguingly original, which I like quite a bit as well!

I will slowly be reading further into your story, and i will attempt to leave at least one more review, which you can expect at chapter 16 after i've finished. In summary, i think you have a wonderful (and because i too am an author, fascinating) writing style, which along with your plot i will slowly continue to enjoy.

Have a good day, and happy new years!

I was supposed to review after Chapter 5, but this chapter just cried for one. :D

I like the fact that Lynn's character remained constant all throughout the chapter (the awkward goodbye, her clumsiness in the forest, her initial incredulity at Wreander, and so on). Even the part where something snapped inside of her. It's always the quiet ones who show the most surprising behaviors when subjected to stressful situations. Perfect choice of words when she realized what she'd done: "abnormal audacity." :D

Wow... Regarding Wreander, words fail me. He seemed like a nice, run-of-the-mill potential companion for Lynn, except that he doesn't appear to be... fully human. What with him spouting off stuff about the fork in her path and glowing and floating like some kooky messenger of fate (I guess, that's why the title? XD). What an a$$. Still, it wouldn't be interesting if he weren't, right? :D

~Ryan L

I love pokemon but so the stories of fanfiction are some of my favorites. but lately its been hard finding a really good story because all the original used now a days lack substance. They're the same old mary sues starting their new pokemon journey blah blah blah.. finally something interesting. cant wait till your next update

Thank god, this fic is alive again! I'm just glad that I saved the recit for the tombstone. This was pretty good, Just keep the story flowing! keep up the good work, and update soon :)






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OOH THIS IS EXCITiNG!!

You seem to be very good with first chapters. Openers like these can really draw a reader straight into the story. Although I'm not much into this kind of violence in pokemon fanfics (particularly murder), I think this was done just right: "Silently, the Arcanine extended his nails. The whites of the youth’s eyes gleamed in his battered face." In my humble opinion, I agree that there is no need to mention the blood.

I can really imagine the forest, the hammock with Lynn in it, and even her worn-out clothes. Though I'm not sure if Mother Woodwort was important enough a character to merit a little more description, such as if she was plump, skeletal, had a tangle of white, unruly hair or white hair that was tied in a neat bun, etc. I personally would have liked to imagine her in my mind a bit more (but that's just me).

This is quite a twist in the usual trainer/journey fic. And considering how trainers are treated, something that was emphasized rather shockingly in the very first chapter, I wonder how she'll fare.

Just some stuff that may strengthen your writing (the "-ing" in some verbs that I pointed out in a previous review): "All along the far boundary of the glade, forest plants and trees were bending to the sides..." may be better off as "All along the far boundary of the glade, forest plants and trees bent to the sides..." (Chapter 3). Just a very minor point.

I love your description of Asphodel, especially the contrast of the "wilting blossom and limp leaves" and its eyes ("Unlike the colors of the flower, these eyes had only sharpened with age.").

That is SOME coming-of-age ceremony! I got goosebumps reading it.

Somehow, I am not surprised that Lynn fled. The way you built up her personality in this chapter and in the previous one made that act so... Lynn. :D

I hope you don't mind if I take my time reading this. "Seven Feathers" has become one of those fics that I'd like to take my time reading. It's more enjoyable for me that way. :D

~Ryan L

There isn't really anything to tell you...Except maybe could you add some new characters?

nice. but no updates in 2 years? please that's just antaganizing me. please if your not going to update then put the story on hiatues(sorry I can't spell) or tell us. anyway I absolutly love this fic! I really do hope you decide to update. faved! keep up the good work:)

Wow... This is an amazing story. In the story in the earlier chapters, the fourth heir with the Pikachu sounds like Ash. Am I right? Anyway, I love this story! Continue!

It's a shame but this story looks like it won't be updated again; and I rather liked this one. It felt--it WAS--unique, different. And you know what, it still is, evenif it is unfinished.

This story is a part of the worst stories I have read. You wanna know why? BECAUSE YOU HAVEN'T UPDATED IN A YEAR! RAARGH! EVERY SINGLE GREAT STORY I EVER READ LAST UPDATED AGES AGO, usually leaving a cliffhanger or something, AND TAUNTING ME! If you have any mercy...unless you are dead...please update soon...

Um, is this an epilogue or prologue? You're confusing me...

Neat! All that time Lynn was talking to Feldspar she didn't even relieze he was a larvitar!

Wow... this was... amazing, this is getting better and better, I eagerly await the next chapter, I am really getting more into the story then before. Didn't see any problems.

...cool a rebal fic awsome lol