WOW! That is skilled! I loved that...tingles up the spine!

The double rhyming couplets were very clever, I loved the impact they had, chilling.

I like the rhythm too, fairly normal, but because of the circumstances I could see Sirius rocking back and forwards.

Fave line..."Reaching out of dark memory's thin, weaving veil" I loved that...I thought of the DOM veil of course, but I really liked that..foreshadowing was it?

love kangaroo (again)

Wow, I love it, the thoughts about James and Lily, Harry calling for him . . . The way you described the Dementors and the 'norm' I still have goosebumps. The thing that touched me the most was when Sirius thought about Harry and Moony. I really don't know what to say but Wow.
And yes, if you would accept the position as my beta-reader, I would be so thrilled. Many things to talk about, but here is not the place
Mrs. Fawkes~
P.S~ I have a yahoo account that you can e-mail me at, I do not wish to post my main e-mail adress for anyone to see: Mrs_Fawkes1@yahoo.com
Hoping to here from you soon!

Lovely, absolutely lovely. You've really managed to capture Sirius's agony while he was locked up in Azkaban, and you managed to ryhme as well, good job! An excellent peice!!

Wow. Wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow, wow . . . WOW! Loved it, loved it, loved it . . . Er . . .
The poem was great - wonderfully written and thought out. In my opinion, you were looking through Sirius' eyes when you wrote it. You captured the moment and feelings and expressed them perfectly. If Sirius was real, he would probably said, "Bloody hell, do I have a twin that has MY brain?!" . . . LOL . . .
This is definitely one of my favorite stories. I'm glad I put you on my Favorite Authors list. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. ~_^