Reviews for The Challenge of Daydraea's Bracelets

Reviews For: The Challenge of Daydraea's Bracelets

Mattias 2004-12-11 ch 3,	abuseDamn it, Jess update this thing. XD
Saridaru-chan 2004-01-06 ch 3, anon.	abuseKewlioes! Yes I know no other words... Lol! Aww!! I reeaally like this story!! XD You're so good with the characters!! I read your profile, too! So true! lol! It seems you touched on where Gilder did get the info. I am glad! lol. Sorry for blasting you for the OOC Gilder. I just see that everywhere! But it wasn't that ooc... Umm now the story...yeah I dunno if you really need the 2nd chapter. I mean you could have introduced the story about the eons a little later. We don't need to know the whole story...unless it's needed for later chapters! Buutt I think it would have been better if...like...someone was telling them the story rather than the Eon story just being there for extra info. I see why you didn't have it as a prologue though...No one would have read it. :S I mean that in the sincerest way...lol. No really it's better if you get straight to the story. That's just me though...and I have a low attention span...lol! Expecially with Senioritis...Bleeh... Wow...yes I write long reviews...sometimes. Especially when I'm trying to get outta work (like now...EEp!) But, really, you already know what you're doing. Keep it up! :D:D
Thomas Fitzgibbons 2003-12-30 ch 2,	abuseNot bad, not bad at all. Thsi is very well-written and original. I think the second chapter should have gone first and acted as a prologue, but that's just nitpicking.
Saridaru-chan 2003-12-28 ch 1, anon.	abuseOh, how I like your plot. :D "...he brandished the torch ahead of them which lit their way." I dunno I woulda changed it to "...he brandished the torch ahead of them, lighting the way." But it's fine. Love the name. Daydraea... One thing bothered me...(there's always something -_-;) Ok, yes everyone loovves Gilder but really folks he's not some super genius guy. Sure lots of people would like him to be but really how come Gilder knows something that Fina doesn't? So yah...only way I could figure is he got the info from some pirates or...something. But it seemed a tad OOC... Woot! Really good! Plot's kewl! I really enjoyed this. :D

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