Most Excellent, love the descriptive wording, makes it all the more visual.

When I read your Matrix fanfic, 'rise fists to defend', it sort of confused me. I mean, I knew the narrator's point of view was throu Neo's perspective, but just the dialogue was a little bit confusing in the begining. Only later did was I able to confirm myself that Neo's talking, describing about Trinity. About what though, his pain, her pain in life, or something else. That I'm a little confused on. You might want to make things a little clearer for the reader. Over all, it's a very good story, great description, and the slight negative mood in the story helps emphasize Neo's feelings towards Trinity as the narrator. Perhaps there is a lot of symbolism and hidden meaning. Despite the slight confusion, it was still a great story and had great description and detail. I enjoyed reading it a lot.

Wow- this story is great, an original angle on neo's life before the matrix, his opinions on Trinity, and beautifully written! Please update soon!

"Or contact and wordlessness, shared breath the only music. A soundtrack to blend with the rain outside your window and the constant hum of electronics in this room."
You amaze me. Your narration is tight yet descriptive and scenes flow so flawlessly from one to the other - the term 'prose' doesn't even begin to compare.
I especially appreciate how even as Trinity reveals her true identity, Neo experiences no regret at his mistaken assumption; somehow it implies that Trinity - hundred percent woman as she is - is still capable of giving him all the protection he may ever need (or long for) regardless of her sex. Amen & amen.

I haven't left a review at the hardline since i just can't express myself very well with such gorgeous writing such as this.Gosh, you just made my day...finally in such a long time, an insight into neo's days before his unplugging-AND what he thought of Trinity at first sight too. A 100/10 for you!

I *really* enjoyed that. Wow. I don't even know how to describe that. Neo's hopes for who he thinks Trinity might be (and the fact that he thinks it's a male... well that's just fun). Then he finds out she's a woman, and of course he's disappointed. But, little does he know...
Oh, the ironing is delicious! :D ;)

VERY cool. I really enjoyed reading this. I've never seen anything remotely like it that I can recall, and it was refreshing. I especially liked the commentary about Furbys. (?) Furbies? No idea, but however the hell they're spelled, it was really amusing. Great work!
~DM