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Princess-Lalaith 2007-10-18 . chapter 14
Oh my god!
I was really hopinh you wouldn't do that. I mean, are they really going to miss all of Connor's childhood and half of his teenage-years like he did with the cannon-Connor? BEcause that's really so unfair! And when are they finally going to Really be together?
Well...I guess that if I really want answers I should go to the sequel, right? YEah, I think I'll do that. See ya there!
Mentally Insane Fangirl 2006-06-11 . chapter 4
THis is a good story!Im glad you wrote this fic!
luv the story (see chapter 14 comments first) 2003-12-29 . chapter 13
If you can, it would be cool to have Connor come back younger then he did in Angel, like 3-8 years old. Then it might be easier to add in Buffy's part in the story. Can't wait for chapter 15!
Signed,
A Loyal Bangel Fan
luv the story 2003-12-29 . chapter 14
NO! It ended to sadly...*sniffle*
Please DON'T include the Cordelia/Connor stuff. Now that Connor's Buffy's child instead of Darla, that would just be way to weird, because of how much the two gangs are connected and stuff.
Are you going to add Dawn in? You can't really add Dawn if you don't add Glory, and that would be a little weird after how you have taken the story. I also like it how you didn't do the whole 'the father will kill the son' thing. Excellent plot choice.
How do you plan to deal with the time while Connor's gone? After he comes back *please* don't make him completely mad at B/A, and put Angel in the bottom of the Ocean.
Including the Beast will be interesting if you do plan to, because of how you would have to send Cordelia away, and the Connor/Cordelia relationship would have to be formed for Jasmine.
Can't wait to see how you handle Season 4 Angel and Season 6 Buffy, and PLEASE DON'T INCLUDE TARA DYING! (Although Willow and Tara moving into Angel's place would be cool!)
:-)
Signed,
A Loyal Bangel Fan
ecstasy_of_grief 2003-12-29 . chapter 14
aww! please continue this is a great story!! please post more asap! :)
Diane LD 2003-12-29 . chapter 14
Hmm... well, I'll be honest here. While this story certainly has the potential to very interesting, it's falling short of that potential.
The main problem with this story is that it would never happen. You have characterized Buffy and Angel's relationship as too fluffy and easy; not at all the angst and drama that it is. You write the curse conflict as if it wasn't there, as if it didn't matter. You write it as though it has no bearing in the B/A relationship.
Buffy's relationship with the Scoobies is too sugary sweet-- Buffy practically abandons her friends without a word, and Oz comes in and says it's time for board games? I don't think so. Willow is an extremely strong character when she wants to be, and you allow Buffy to walk all over her. Worst of all, you write it if she doesn't care her best frined is moving off with her boyfriend two hours away and they'll probably never see eachother regularly again.
The prophecy of Connor's birth is interesting; covers a few plot holes. Okay, Buffy and Angel are having a prophecized baby. Why isn't Buffy reacting to this? She is the Slayer, and she has a strong love for humanity. I'm assuming it would only be a hundred times stronger for that of her own flesh and blood. This child is going to be a warrior! It's going to face death and destruction at every corner! Don't you think Buffy, as a mother, would be a little angry about that?
Faith is forgiven too easily; the Buffy in those seasons, is not very mature. You had a very promising beginning conversation between Faith and Buffy, with Buffy's scathing remarks about all of Faith's betrayals, but it was ruined by Buffy saying "If you can try; I can too! Lets be bestest friends!" Or at least that's how it came off as. Buffy's character would never be able to handle Faith, especially a freindship with Faith-- nor would she be able to handle a hugfest between Angel and Faith. See the Angel episode "Sanctuary."
Gunn seems too nice (sister killed by vamps! He's really not over that yet) as does Cordelia (in the beginning she was nicely characterized; "Stop brooding Angel!"- type thing, but she had no reaction to Buffy. Cordelia is fiercely protective of Angel, and she doen't like Buffy. Buffy is pregnat with Angel's child. There is so much potential for good conflict there, it was kind of a waste you didn't take it). Wesley is written as a chump, "Here, watch our baby with no protest, and be the research guy that no one appreciates!" (to which Chump!Wesley answers "Of course, Angel. I can't start thinking for myself now, can I?"). Spike would never apologize to Buffy or Angel for anything.
There are a few grammer and spelling mistakes, but those are pretty minor.
This story has a good premise and excellent potential for charcter growth and conflict, but you don't take it. Nevertheless, it is readable and guiltily enjoyable. I hung on and read all 14 chapters, so you have at least held my attention.
All in all, an okay story that could have been excellent.
This is meant to be a piece of constructive critisicm, and I hope it is taken as such.
Feel free to email me back,
D
sundevil009@yahoo.com
CF 2003-12-29 . chapter 14
Great fic,I'm assuming Conner will return as an 18 year old like the show?
Rbritsmom73 2003-12-29 . chapter 14
Please don't have Conner come back like he did on the show. Let him come back as a baby. Please update soon.
Elizabeth 2003-12-29 . chapter 14
This a a great story! Can't wait for the next update.
crazy4b/a2 2003-12-29 . chapter 1
Hey this is a really good story i hope u cioontinue...hmm...mayb u mite get more reviews if u go to options and allow anonomyus reviews
Munebunny 2003-12-29 . chapter 14
I can't say that I like the Holtz plot line, but at least you didn't kil Conner. Will he be all man shaped when he appears again?
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