This is great! I love it! I hope you work on this update soon.

Great novelization you've got going so far. I can't wait for more! I especially love the way you wote Rydia, and how she seemed to look up to Cecil almost as a father. Rydia is my favorite FF female; I can't wait till you get to the underworld part of the game so she'll be back. ^^

Heh. Here I am again. Kinda lost track of some of the good stories in-between the endless amount of crap here. But no worries. Now to the story:

Brilliant. I can see that your writing has improved greatly since you started this little series of yours. I certainly enjoyed your writing back then, and definitely love it now. The part with Cecil and the chocobo was priceless. Man, Cecil and those birds... Cute. I love the depth you are adding to certain scenes and to the characters--it was much needed, for we all know the video game...lacked in some places. The still hostile reaction of the Mysidians was nicely done--real and believable, instead of them all suddenly accepting him. Palom's endlessly funny. Great job.

Revamping your story too? I'll be sure to check it out when you are finished then :)
I'll wait for your next chapter, but be warned, I'll probably start bugging you if you don't finish fast enough!

Happy holidays.
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It's nice to see that you've started the second installment of your story. Looking forward to reading more.