Mechanism of defense.

X33 Akemi

Ohh...

This is bad..

Plastic surgery?

XD

X33 Akemi

Hey I like it but you should actually write what he writes in the notes cuz I'm dieing of curiosity !
xD xD xD

i love it

It seem that you haven't updated your story for such a long time. I'm waiting for the update eagerly. So please, there are many viewers that loves your story. Keep maintaing your story and update it quickly. Please,...

Hi there! well.. there's nothing really wrong with the plot, only that, you have to be more consistent when it comes to grammar okay? And even the sequencing of the the scenes, you have to be more aware of that, and try to be articulate, because i notice that if you want to give details on the expression/emotions, you use other words/supporting words (adverbs) too much that makes the sentence, a bit confusing. But you don't have to worry, because i got what were you trying to convey in the story. I'm sorry if i have to give such feedback, because, i myself, is a writer, and our group is currently doing a research about fanfiction writers, and we have to provide them the story we criticize and as well as our feedback. but please do reply, if you wish. Thanks, that was a cute story! keep it up!

wow good story, it was sad and kute! it got me cunfused sumtimes, but then i figured it out! hope 2 read the sequel soon!

i'm sorry but this story is just slow, doesn't really make much sense and doesn't flow well at all. good plot idea though.

i love it

I totally don't even understand your story. Very badly written. No offence, the plot is AWESOME, and I understand that fact that even if you have a great idea in your head, it's hard to put down on paper, but you're sticking too much to the original forms of sentences that we learned in 1st Grade. Please branch out; it can only get better!

Um... 'Shaoran' or 'Shaoron' is not how you spell his name. It's 'Syaoran'. I haven't read the book for quite a while, and even I know that. Please don't make that mistake again; it's kind of annoying. The story so far is kinda boring. I like the summary, but the actual story is very dull. Please put something more in it; some spice or somethin'.
:P
a kid

i love ur story...its sad..and then happy..and then awesome...but some parts(to be honest) are eh...so..8.9/10

This story is really cool. I like it a lot. Sure there are lots of grammers mistakes (sorry if that offened you.), but I still really like it!! ^^

Very nice. ^^ Sorry for not reviewing been busy with school >_<

I like it!!