Very fun story. I'm guessing from the age that it's probably abandoned now, but still, thanks for sharing it with us.

Great story but when is it set?

I really,really like this story and would like to see more chapter's.

nice. wanted to see more, but nice none the less.

Trapped is a great story. I like how it has been expanded from it's original form. Why hasn't it been continued over the last few years?

Do you need inspiration for school or the enemies the Senshi should face while waiting for Chibi-Usa to be born? What about the Great Freeze? The two Senshi made by Ranma and Ukyo are completing the team for Setsuna but what need is there for them?

I'd say more but can't think of anything to add right now beyond repeating it's great and wishing you had more written.

Spokavriel

All i want for Christmas is another chapter, another chapter, another chapter.
That being said, this is a good fanfiction and i hope to read more.

This is just a review of the first chapter, and how I responded to it as a reader. Grammatical nitpicks abound.

Firstly, your author's note at the start came off as really defensive - almost like you were ashamed of the story you were writing, or EXPECTING to be flamed. Neither are really attractive hooks for a reader.

Second sentence: "She knew they're future". They're should be their.

Second paragraph: "the purple-haired girl snuggling deep into the embrace of the red-headed." That should either be "red-headed girl" (or your choice of noun) or simply "redhead". The first few paragraphs also have a very disjointed feel to them. LOTS of sentences are broken up with semi-colons, and while it's not strictly wrong, it's stylistically jilting, at least to me.

00-03: Hotaru Looked. The L shouldn't be capitalized.

00-05: "Ryoga knew...dual for it." Duel. Dual is for things like "Ranma's dual nature". The "Ranma killed a demigod" thing is also a personal pet peeve of mine - Ranma had a whole lot of help in that fight, particularly the use of magical artifacts that were tailor made to counter Saffron's powers. It seems unlikely that Ryoga, a master of rationalization, would be awed in the face of such an easy explanation. Additionally, the exchange between Ryoga and Ranma seems out of character - neither speaks like you're writing them. Ranma's not that articulate, Ryoga doesn't express hesitant skepticism, etc.

Ukyo also doesn't seem likely to have a tearful prayer about her betrayal. She's typically always convinced that what she's doing is right. Describing herself as "a jealous girl filled with unrequited love" is in particular ridiculously OOC. It just feels like the author speaking through the characters. That point just broke the story for me - if Ukyo was indeed supposed to reach some epiphany about her actions, it was forced and rushed and just unnatural feeling. "Show, not tell." and all that.

it is a good story and wonder when pluto is going to talk with ranma, ukyo about them being scouts. wonder how the scouts will react to the news of the new scouts being that one is pluto's sister.

wonder what going to happen to ranma and ukyo after joining ryouga family. when are they going to get their transform sticks or remember their past lives as sailor scouts. it will be fun to read what happens in the sixth chapter.

Overall, I like the story. Quite a few typos, and I sure as heck didn't like the outfit Sol and Star had in Chapter 5 (the mask in particular), but it's a story I'm definitely hoping you'll continue. I've seen fics picked up after more than a decade of neglect, so I still have more than a little hope that such will be the case with you.

Also, as a side note, you seem to have gotten much better as the chapters progressed, particularly in your characterization. Good job on that. ^^

Neat. I like it. Keep it coming.

OK, good fight scene, I loved the truck! The thing about hibikis is a little over done, but... It works, and is interesting.

I'm not sure why the crying Setsuna of the previous chapter waited so long to meet them, but she's back to her usual tricks in this chapter. Huh.

"High quality costume shop!" is a cry that should ring in the hearts of many. Reminds me of the scene from Blade: the Last Vampire.

On the other hand, THE CONTINUAL SPELLING ERRORS WILL MAKE ME GOUGE OUT MY EYES!! one one. (OK, maybe not, but still). You have some interesting, developing dialogue, ruined, because the text itself is nearly unreadable.

Sigh. Still, this is good enough, I'll look forward to the next chapter when you get around to it.

More minor typos. If I never make it past 5, it'll be because of the spelling errors in really good parts. Tonight we morn? Argh!

But we got to the meat of the story, things are happening from when you wrote this before! On the other hand, while I can say "OK, he needed to get the plot moving" I am confused by the motivations of some of the characters.

Nodoka just gives up on her child? Maybe she's angry, but what possible reason would Happosai have of all people? Where are Natsumi and Kurumi?

I still don't entirely get the significance of the scene at Ukyo's place. There is a climactic build-up, and a sense of some significant event taking place. And then there's Ranma and Ukyo, who, without talking, significant glances, no dramatic description, they just resolve things. It works, but... it's a stretch. Maybe it's me, I just don't like the feel of the scene. And then having Belldandy there to transition the scene makes it seem forced. She's not quite revealing things. Why?

Still the ending of the section with the big reveal was nicely done. The bath scene was touching. And the relationship between Ranma and Kasumi is touching and believable.

A few more spelling errors, hear instead of hear.

I like where you're going with it, but not how you're doing it. I think this is a personal feeling: I personally would have focus on the introspective moment, or tried to narrate Ranma's thoughts as she practiced and got used to her body--a mental notes of all the corrections.

Also there seems to be some waffling after the initial transformation: Ranma practically embraces womanhood after the cure, and now she doesn't want to wear panties? Further, why should Belldandy, a Goddess, care? Is she trying to train Ranma? Is it a social question? She's been established as a wise character--why is she trying to "fix" someone?

Ranma's determination: awe-inspiring, and personally, right on the money. It's a notable character point, that I'm glad you're drawing attention to, without making it the defining characteristic.

Very good, so let's press on to the next chapter!

Agh!

She's not a star! It's flair! Flair is style, flare is dangerous.
Between you and Ozzy, that one word drives me off the page.

Much better rewrite than on your personal website. It looks much better and seems to be more polished. Good for revisiting it, I look forward to the rest!