i like it! would you ever finish it though? just wondering. XD

great story, please update soon

5pts. (Ah the joy of moving.) anyway I don't think that talk went very well. can't wait for more! :)

If I want to read something, I will read it. The only reason no one else is complaining is because the Mary Sue hunters still haven't found this yet.
Oh, you're so mature. Female dog! I'm put in my place completely.

5pts. Hum Kyle. I don't think Serverus is going to like Kyle. more please?

Continue this story please

Sounds interesting. Hope you'll write more soon.

Mary Sue. I certainly hope that you were trying to create an awful Sue. Because if this headache is from a serious attempt . . . ugh.

woo! I trust ur makin a sequel?
cant wait...
Hen*

5 points for using a referense when explaining something. another 5 points for making me laugh because you used it from the lion king. That was interesting. So if I'm going to judge on this story i need more.