Sorry but the last line made me want to jump out of the window.. in a good way.OK metaphorically speaking. Bold to write in the present tense first person as I would imagine it's very difficult not to go off in a past/future imperfect etc etc tense spin. It works really well, so I guess when you are in the right zone it comes together when you have an idea. Really like it, stand alone or even if you did want to take it further. Thank you. Louise

I love all the ifcs I can read about this episode, because there just should have been more there. I liked this, it was a great fic from Jack's point of view :)

Wow! That was great! I thought the second person really added to it. Neat twist.

wait, i'm confused...haven't you've already posted this story?
oh well, i don't mind reviewing again!
much love to ya sweetie!