really good i would never have expected a air balloon


but i hava a question i would like answered
i hope u can answer it
HOW DO THEY USE THE WASHROOM??
that has been on my mind please answer me

p.s i love the whole thing with the coke

Very cute. I can't to read your sequel. Ja ne!

awsumeness!!

I have to say that I have no idea what this story is about and that it is quite possible that it has the best plot ever written. However, I cannot read it as it simply contains too much of what my beta has termed "fangirl Japanese." I can understand the use of unique Japanese terms such as "youkai," "hanyou," etc., and even the suffix titles such as "-kun" and "-chan." What I cannot tolerate, however, is the use of "hai" or "iie" which we have perfect equivalents for in English. Since you are writing in English, you really should refrain from including snippets of other languages in your story - it makes the plot smoother and much more believable. I'm glad that you have so many avid fans and readers, but I'm sad to say that I cannot join them (especially after reading some of the reviews - they say that your story is really funny). Anyway, I hope my constructive criticism did not offend you or deter you from writing. :)

Great story! I loved it!

Its one of my faves!

Keep writing! Your great :]

i loved it ^.^ found it this morning!

=) ja

wait! what does Mujaki mean?

this is GREAT iloved it

You are an awsome writer! And I LOVE LOVE LOVE this story.. never delete it ok? because i keep rereading it over n over n over...

Um right... Well, in most cases I would recomend(sp) more description, but I find that regarding to this story, it didn't really need it. It would put blocks in the flow which was amazingly well done and made it easy to read (not as in amature easy, but enjoyable easy)! so i'd say leave it the way it is. Of course, there are a few grammatical errors here and there - not as many at the end - like when you wrote 'chose' in present tense when it should be 'choose'; as well as with the difference between 'of' and 'off', but that's me just being picky. Anyways, I've yet to read the sequal so I'll go off and do that. Truly though, amazing story. AMAZING! Like my favorite on fanfiction amazing. Great job! (gods this is long!)

Bye! Toodles! And a 'WOOP!' for you.

~Luna~

Just a tad hyper... :D

OMG ive been readin this story 4 so freakin long! its awesome by the way! i recomended it to my friends lol so DO NOT and i mean DO NOT at any point in the next few months delete this story or else ill know where u post... o watch your postings for more details...

hee hee incase this review has caused you any inner turmoil just follow my instructions and youll b happy

... sry bout this review im kinda insane rite now hee hee

LOL! i kept on laughing , and laughing , and laughing, and laughing at kagome's pranks! can't wait to read the sequel!

Your writing improved a great deal as the story progressed. I do think the characters were a bit imature for their ages but that is an author's choice.

The Author's Notes in the chapters were annoying and distracting, I wouldn't recommend them in the sequel. A bit more description of surroundings and exactly what is happening would be helpful as well, but that was improving with each chapter.

Good job with this.

~QueenTatooine

This is a great concept I love your story!!

great beginning n ima really lookin' forward to da rest of da chappies!

oh man /woman your story rocks OUT F* LOUD!
plz continue to write storys ne?
ttfn/ja
loser-girl