that fic was really good i loved it! please make a sequel i can't wait to read more!

KatieJO, I am about to give you some advice. Please don't take it the wrong way... I really think that you had a good story line going. It just had too many extra stories. I know you joked of the unrealistic aspect of your story, which proves you have a well rounded sense of humor. But here is my critique, if Wayne had been involved at the time of the other murders, he couldn't have been with Bessie. Actual police officers would've taken him down as he was an accomplice to the murders. As was Sapphire, she witnessed them, she could also have been an accomplice. Sorry, that's what I saw wrong with the story. The rest of it was really suspensful, that's what compelled me to read all of the chapters. But I think you have a good idea of writing going here and I hope you'll forgive me for my critique. But if you really are serious about writing a book, then you need a little more realisticness to your stories. Lucy.

Okay so I finished the whole thing. I really had to get over the spelling but I did. I have to say that your story was innovative. I liked it. I had to admit that it was slow going in the beginning but you picked it up at the end. I think I read the last 10 chapters in one sitting.
I have only one complaint about the end and it's I don't think that he should have raped Joey. Rape is a big deal and her reaction to it happening was to unbelievable. That sort of thing destroys a woman. Joey was just too cavalier about the whole thing. So unless she's about to loose it in your sequel, then I really think that your description about her reaction to the rape just doesn't ring true.
Anyway I enjoyed it and I guess the best feed back of all is that I intend to read the sequel. Keep up the good work!

heey!! I hope everything will be fine with joey.. But hey! They're together!! YUPI! I hope you make a new story soon and update your other stories too!! wohoo

I love it I love it I love it U must have a sequel

oh another cliffhanger! really wanna kow what will happen! cant wait for more...

hey!!
I don't know if i'm number 50 but still.. good work..!! keep writing!! yey!

OMG YOu must update soon. ARe they going to make it out ok. U must update soon

oh i really like this chapter, especially the little cliffhanger at the end! keep it up, cant wait for next chapter... it is a bit unrealistic but thats the fun of it! v original idea of urs.

OMG!! You have to save Joey...actually, Pacey needs to save her..LOL...he should be the knight in shining armor in this story! *wink*
Loved it! Update soon!

HEY !! IDIOT PACEY!! That's like your queuto like go AND * barge in! When the wires don't work it means there's something WRONG you idiot! Well I liked this chapter because i can call pacey an idiot for letting het do this.. keep up! And pleasee make everythin right!!

OMG u have to update u have to update i love it

hey!! I'm sorry i haven't reviewed in years and years, but i was waay too busy! I like what you've done, things are getting interesting.. hmm But if the police knew where breath was, why didn't they just go in?? Why put joey in danger?? i hope everything works out... :D keep writing!!

u must update

O my gosh! why must all authors leave cliffys. yours is blood brilliant. NOW UPDATE!UPDATE!UPDATE