aw that was so cool i like the so very much you did a great job :)

i have only just read this, but all i can say is that i love it! i'm looking forward to reading more from you, hopefully some original stuff on the new site. looking forward to reading all of the stroies in the series as well.
ttys xox

This is an AWESOME start to the series. As i sed, i think that you should have been in the top three on bloody quills 2004, but that is neither here nor there!!

I want to read your Pentagram Water. I MUST MUST MUST MUST MUST MUST read it. So, start putting it up on here! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE i am proper addicted!

PLEASE

Lotsa love

Akasha
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i think it wos preety gud.

i think it wos preety gud.

whoa. long. well, looking at the chapter count it looks long. i promise i'll finish reading it! i'm just quite a way from the end

thanks for reviewing my fic! like yours too
DR

After your story was sent to me by the Information department, I thought long and hard about whether it was PPC-worthy. The difficulty of working in the L.J. Smithverse is that she created so many Mary Sues herself that when fanfic authors do it, it's hard to call it uncanonical. In that respect, I've decided that your story isn't worthy of PPC attention. It doesn't depart far enough from L.J.'s own heroine-template to be considered a Sue. However, there is plenty more for me to critisize.
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First, your spelling is atrocious. My dear, surely you have access to a computerized spell-check somewhere. At school, if not at home. You absolutely MUST spell-check your documents before you upload them. You MUST. It hurts the eyes to read something like this when the English is so badly mangled. And speaking of the English, your grammar is only one step better than your spelling. Commas, my dear. USE them. Get a beta reader. You desperately need one. You seem to have some decent plot ideas, but your skills as a writer are sorely lacking and you could definately stand to take a couple of writing classes before you try to put anything else up where discerning readers can find it.
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Good Day.

*sobs*
that was really gud
the last part!
oh well, i got da sequal 2 look 4ward 2! ^_^

Oh...i like!

nice

o, i like!!
Blake! *Drools*
Chris! *Drools agen!*
well, upd8, and don't leave me hanging...
oh, did i mention...DIS CHAP WOZ GR8!

that totally sucks havin ure comp taken away
that story is totally brilliant!
i had to copy and paste it but it was FAB!
who is that person at the end of chap 15?

hey, dat's okay man!
bummer bout da comp taken away 4rm u

Oh My God, i totally had no idea i didn't review dis chappie!
i read it, but 4got 2 review...
oh, BTW, i've changed my Pen name 2 night dreamer, as u've guess, LOL
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