Really sad!

This is impresive. It's a type of poetry I like to use, it has that certain dramatic touch.

This is a fantastic poem! You can definately write!

JessieRose

Do you think Sirius had a girlfriend? Would that mean she was an auror? I really liked it but is this from the girlfriend's point of view? Still really cool!

For some reason, at the very final line, tears pricked the backs of my eyes. I don't know why.

The poem itself, the rigid way it seems to be written, emphasiszes somehow the tense, rigid feelings being portrayed.

The poem is very vivid, an economical, sphisticated, somehow direct translation from feelings to words.

In short, you've done it again. True inspiration took ahold of you, and you've written something incredible.

Ok-I can't really say what this is. I like it though.

This is good

ummm hi. people have told me to um say things...i shall not reveal the wisdom but i shall just say that this is a good poem and such. DOn't bother to read my stuff because it is all immature and random. i repeat, good poem, excellent pen name.

Woo. I really liked that, mainly because of your brazen approach to the topic. No gilded pills here - or boring imagery. Just word, word, word - like the bang of a shotgun. Niiiccceee. Gimme more! -MV

OOO Very nice! I'd offer some constructive critisism, but none is needed! Original and lvoely, always a good combination. :)

Kudos,

Iggie (A fellow Remus lover)

stick to your stories, they're very good. this was just too confusing

You're right. It was disturbing, but in an excellent way. You're a great poet! (I try to write free-verse poetry, but it ends up depressing and stupid. And my rhyming poems just end up stupid...) Nice metaphors!

:) Alanna :)

I understand it... a little.

Makes no sence

strange little poem