This just seems like you're trying (and failing) to be edgy and cool.

Damn, that was good. Now I feel sorry for Andross. I like your writing. ^^

Ah! Freaky! That was pretty sick but I liked it. You're a good writer.

Excellent. Kinda follows the psyche of Andross and the Venomians I have in my fanfics. I'm intrigued to learn more. Keep up the good work.

It's hard to say what I think of that- it was certainly very unusual. Having said that, I'm not in any way insulting you. The writing was excellent but I did have some difficulty grasping exactly what was going on- not that I'm complaing, it makes life more interesting. Will there be a second part? I'd like to know more.