|Reviews for Tears of a Soul|
| Emheli Sherrell 5/31/13 . chapter 18
Just finished reading ! It's amazing!
| Emheli Sherrell 5/31/13 . chapter 10
Hahaha you fell asleep? I am surprised how you could fall asleep while posting something as amazing as this!
| Emheli Sherell 5/31/13 . chapter 5
You are amazing at writing! This story so far is amazing!
| UltimateNinjaOfDoom 5/24/13 . chapter 18
this was a very good story it had me completely hooked
| Guest 3/28/13 . chapter 1
why all the bold? ._.
| Guest 2/15/13 . chapter 1
i love ur stories and i would like to know whitch one comes first
| Rose-of-Bone 2/10/13 . chapter 6
Wow. Elrond is goooood.
| Elwing Elendil 5/14/12 . chapter 18
Well, I must say that I was a bit surprised. Aragorn stabbing Legolas? I did not see it coming. Also, I have never seen this before. Therefore, I liked the concept even if your use of it quite annoyed me. No, this is not a flame for I am hardly a flamer. I simply want to give an honest review.
Please, do not be offended for I do not intend to bash your work.
Since I am really tired (Mother’s Day killed me at work yesterday), I’ll explain what annoyed me in a brief way.
“To his delight, the blade of his dagger found its mark, burying itself deeply in his opponent.”
“His hands clutched desperately at the hilt of the knife, which was being cruelly twisted deeper into his gut, while his blood gushed over his hands and the ones belonging to the human.”
“The ranger suddenly frowned at how strangely light and thin his enemy was; he knew orcs to be much heavier.”
“When the wound was uncovered, Aragorn saw that the blade had entered the right side of Legolas' midsection, just to the right of his navel.”
The dagger was buried “deeply” into Legolas’ “thin” body to Aragorn’s “joy”. Thus, it is right to deduce that the blade was completely inside the elf because it didn't have much to pierce to get through him. Also, Aragorn intended to “kill” the orc so he was “delighted” because of his perfect stroke. Indeed, you wrote that he stabbed Legolas to his right side, just to the right of his navel. I think this is a pretty specific place. Moreover, Aragorn “twisted the knife deeper” into Legolas. Do you know what this means? It means that the dagger obviously hit something. It touched at least one of the following: the right kidney, the small intestine or the inferior vena cava. It is a serious injury with a high risk of infection if not tended fast enough. Of course, what is more urgent is the blood loss due to the terrible wound. I know that Legolas is an elf. He is supposed to be more resistant than men and so he should be able to survive for a time the blood loss. However, infection is a different thing.
I think that you lessened greatly the gravity of his injury. Elves are strong all right, but a deadly stroke remains a deadly stroke. Do not misinterpret my words. I hate it when authors kill my favourite character. However, I think that it should have been more difficult for Legolas to sustain such wound. Now there was an other thing that bothered me.
“Legolas' mouth opened as if to answer, but no words came. His eyes, meeting the ranger's, screamed of bewildered agony, before abruptly closing as consciousness slipped away.”
Why Legolas dropped unconscious right away? That didn’t sound right to me. Isn’t he a warrior? He did not see that blow coming all right, but I don’t think that it was enough to scare “the crap” out of him. I think he could have borne the sudden excruciating pain and managed to remain conscious for more than five seconds. If some men are able to stay awake after having lost forty percent of their blood volume, then Legolas can surely do the same.
The “intelligent” orcs was a fine idea, but I must say that their purpose in your story seemed shallow to me. Perhaps you used them in a better way during the sequel that I will of course read. Yes, I never said that I hated your story. There were things that left me quite unsatisfied but there were also things that I did enjoy. Your writing was good (vocabulary and descriptions). The flashback featuring Legolas and young Aragorn was really sweet. The wine episode and the pink bow episode made me laugh! I even made a small avatar of Aragorn wearing a pink bow that you can go see here ( it’s a sort of tribute lol :) ) : .
Defying Death, here I come! :)
| Estic and FlowerFlame 1/5/12 . chapter 1
Just need to add you to fav list.
| Liluthien and Sador 11/7/11 . chapter 18
I did a marathon reading. During one of the chapters an earthquake hit. 4.7 on the richter scale. Ho him... I was bored since we had a 5.6 yesterday.
| Havain 7/9/11 . chapter 3
HURIN AND STRONGBOW FROM THE SILMARILLION! lol, sorry, just had to do that! I immidiately thought of those two buddies when I was reading this. Amazing chapter, although you've completed this by now ;)
| Marceline the Vampire Queen 9/6/10 . chapter 3
OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Aragorn how could u? Angst Angst!
| interruptingcow6732t 9/2/10 . chapter 13
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! But I thought elves don't get drunk? But this fanfiction is WAY better than some of the shit I read on
| Ruusaanyc 4/24/10 . chapter 3
Nice parallel to Hurin and Beleg Cuthalion from Silmarillion! I'm glad that (unlike Beleg) Legolas didn't die. :-)
| MadameGiry25 3/18/10 . chapter 18
This was an excellent story! I read it in one sitting!
I would very much appreciate it if you would read and review my LOTR story, By the love of his children. It's a bit weak at the moment, so any suggestions you might have would be most welcome!
Once again, well done!