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| SilverRaiine 2006-08-17 ch 4,  | abuseAgain Leo's characterization really needs some work..I understand that he's a teen. but I don't feel that it's really...accurate or plausible. |
| SilverRaiine 2006-08-17 ch 2, | abuseUm...not bad. I've checked your profile and I was right in assuming you're a girl. I know you've already finished this fic, but I'll say what I think anyways! The plot seems interesting, and I like how you've portrayed the characters for the most part. I'd really like to see the commas and punctuation a little neater, but I'm dealing, for the most part. Just remember, giggling boys are uncommon, and I don't think eo would be thinking that ANYONE "is so gonna freak". e's a guy! When you write in a male POV, try to...be a guy. Difficult, I know, but realize he thinks differently than us girls. No bad, though! Good luck in any other fics (just becase this one's done. I hope you revise it!) |
| Junkyard Girl 2006-04-02 ch 15, | abuseoh god that was so sad, I almost cried. Almost... |
| Junkyard Girl 2006-04-02 ch 10, | abuseYAY!! OMG YAY!!:):):):):):):):):):):):):):) |
| Junkyard Girl 2006-04-02 ch 9, | abuseDude if I was piper I'd wanna kick that ** sorry ** into next sunday |
| Junkyard Girl 2006-04-02 ch 6, | abuseIf any1 comes home finding them like that they r gonna be in so much trouble |
| Junkyard Girl 2006-04-02 ch 4, | abuseYAY! OMG YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY |
| MAD DOGG 2006-03-14 ch 9, | abuseVERY VERY DIFFERENT |
| MAD DOGG 2006-03-14 ch 6, | abuseWoW WoW WoW WoW WoW WoW DAT WOZ DEFINATLEY DIFFERENT VERY GUUD WORK A THINK |
| MAD DOGG 2006-03-14 ch 4, | abusewell dat woz different lordkray |
| kcdancer 2006-01-11 ch 14, | abuseUNBELIEVABLE!! I love the passion and heat that you give them! |
| kcdancer 2006-01-11 ch 11, | abuseI love the "goodbye my heart" Awesom awesome awesome! |
| kcdancer 2006-01-11 ch 10, | abuseAw that's so sweet! I love it! |
| kcdancer 2006-01-11 ch 6, | abuseOMG! THIS STORY IS AMAZING! The Piper.Leo action is awesome! You are an extraordinary writer |
| Craz Lollipop-Imp 2005-06-25 ch 15, | abusesequel sequel sequel |