 nonny mouse 2006-08-11 . chapter 1 I like it, I am happy you did not go into Ben Parker's death in great deatail, cause we all known the spider-man story and it's been done to death. You have a good set up here, Ranma must of been with the Parkers for a few years, and being his first home in a long time I bet he feels very close to the parkers. Since there seems to be no mention of radioactive spiders, I am guessing he is gonna train up and use his natural martial arts skills? I'd like to see what ya do with the romance you have planned. I am guessing that since genma showed up at the tendos, then enough time passed for Happosai to show up and be a nusaince, plus the time it takes for Kasumi to get married and for Nabiki (?) to apply for study abroad that this is at least a year after the ranma canon start? so he's 17? 18? I am guessing the story of how Ranma ended up with the Parkers will be told soon, probably when Ranma first meets and talks with the new girl. Since she is staying with MJ, will MJ be another love interest (that is will he have lots of girls trying to chase him. MJ, Liz Allen, Betty Brant etc) Will you do the spider-man thing and have Ranma continually duck out of meeting the nice girl next door. (Aunt May was trying for a long time to get Peter to meet the neice of their elderly neighbor (and May's best friend). Since all she would say is she's a nice girl, Peter assumed any 'nice girl' that needs a pair of old ladies to hook her up on a date with must be a real dog. Imagine his surprise when she turned out to be a real looker. hehee 'Tiger, you just hit the jackpot' I think was what MJ first said to peter.) I wonder how his new friend will take it finding out he is the abandoned son of the fat lazy panda?
Anyhow, good setup, though short. I suspect you had an idea and just wanted to put it put there while organizing your thoughts. I hope you write more to this story! Also, Your wizarding ranma stories rock (Been nearly a decade since I read those books but I do remember them still. I just may go find them and reread them.) :) so update those soon too please.
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 Demon Eyes Laharl 2004-01-11 . chapter 1Well, you can forget a war hammer since I got a helmet... ^-^ [joking].
Anyway, to be blunt, the start was shabby, but the story format is great. Just make the second one a bit longer, and a bit more detailed.
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