I can't understand this story

I really liked how you showed the characters - they were both so nicely in character. I can so see this happening in the manga...

poor ed. it stinks when you can't sleep.

Bravo. Good characterizations and discriptions. You nailed it!

Aw, how cute. Just the brother's spending sometime alone like that was really nice.

That was wonderful. Just perfect. Thankyou.

Sleep Well? Hell he didn't sleep at all. Poor Edward.

Not bad, not bad at all.

great story! keep writing! i'd like it if someone could write a longer fic about an adventure they go on.you would probably do good on that. you use a lot of detail so i can "see" the story. i like the part where Ed throws his arms back on to the bed. the "thump. clank." was kinda funny

Funny how a whole lot of something can come from what appears to be just nothing.
That's not to say that this fic was "nothing". Far from it! It appeared to be a simple snapshot to their adventures, some random babble (mostly from Ed's part) but you could also feel the tension and the connection between the two.
Good job! Keep it up!

This is a very nice piece. Now, go move it to the new FMA section so more people can read it, cuz this thing deserves more publicity.

Hee. Ed and Al... Well written, and your characterizations are right on spot. Tragic, yet sweet and funny, just like the series... I liked it. You should write more FMA fic! _

Poor boys. Such a good story tho'. One typo I noticed, when Ed's talking about the Colonel - "I can already imagine that damned little smug..." The word "smile" is missing from the sentence. Otherwise, quite good!

Poor Edward. Al is such a considerate brother. Please write more soon! This was great!
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Super cute!
I think Ed does try really hard to avoid his brother's sympathy - especially considering how hard Al has it, after all.
Good job.