i know who is harry, but who's draco? and and.. WTF i dunno what to say!
well pris i don't exactly have any corrective criticism if thats what ur looking for.. as ur piece is way past my level of comprehension. i liked the angsty style. i screw my pieces up if i attempt writing angst.
what war are u talking about? somehow i keep going back to the vietnam war.. morphine addiction and all.. i dunno what i'm talking about.
"It was Draco kissing him. It was Draco touching him. It was Draco entering him. It was them, and only them spending eternal bliss together as one." tell me they are NOT doing it on the pavement. it's just so wrong. or is tt a flashback?
i liked the way you killed harry. a worthy death and -a lot- of descriptions. it's like prolonged suffering. _ the ending was sweet.. bittersweet kinda thing. such endings leave lasting impressions in ppl like me _
o well guess it didnt help much. ;

so sad
and school is not cool so i'll do my part in making it less torturous

That was very nice and all, I really liked reading it cuz it was all sad and touchy, but Draco seems a little weak I think. Must be the war. BUt I loved how you put that in. Nice!

Very interesting and sad. I liked it very much. You are a good writer.

wow... um... very depressing, and powerful. i wasn't in tears, but it was close.

I loved the story. Almost tissue worthy. If you wanted you could put a twist on it and bring Harry back to life some how. I don't know, maby Draco's love could save him? Just a thought. It's good the way it is though. Write more. -TaraRose

so sad... haha... i am glad that harry died for Draco...

hey, i just stumbled on this-good job, i think you are developing well as a writer, and i like the emphasis on the war. it makes it much more real.

sick!

Poor Harry! Poor *Draco*! Did Harry die? Sorry, but I was slightly confused as to whether the last bit was a flashback or a 'few days later' type-thing.
Excellent work; I love self-sacrificial Harry!

oh! I liked it!
so sad but good!

Hey!
I really love this story. It's so romantic and dark. I was getting sick of the same old stuff. You writing style is lovely.

that was wonderful.

i like it, well done x :)

OMG that was so sad :: burst out into tears:: in a good way :P