*shivers* Freaky. Now THAT was definitely chant-like! You're very good at dark poetry.
This seems to want to be an intro to something... maybe a different sort of poem or even a story. I'm not saying you have to do that, but it's screaming to me it wants to be an introduction.

GREAT rhyming in that one. Made it almost a chant, which works with the topic. Very dark. Nice.