Nice story i really like so much so keep up the good work!!

oh WoW... that was SO touching and AW... cute... man how much do i love the story? anyways keep writing dude cause u rock...

how sweet... very nice... i liked it!

Luvin' it. Was smooth like jazz. Long live Fred/Angelina. ^_^

MORE, MORE, MORE! Excuse my begging, but could you please continue this? This is a great story, funny and sweet, too.

Thank you! its so0o0o0o0o briliant! my sister read it and she loves it! she printed it out and stuck it in one of her books! thank you so much for writing it for me- i lurve you! its better than my sisters version. i hope u continue to write brilliant stories for us to enjoy! u rock
love
faye

Jayde, you're back! Anyway, I liked this a lot. I agree with Ashliegh about Angie being noble. I know if I were in her shoes, I probably would've told everyone they could use a Reserve. The only thing is Oliver still being there. Not that I object to more Wood.

OOh, very nice especially the waffy ending. I, of course madly support the Fred/Angelina ship and hope you do more.

that was mind blowing. I like your style!

Hey Jayde! Good to see you writing more F/A stuff! ^_^ I was really excited to see this!
And I really liked this! I thought it was cool how Angelina still played quidditch for him, even though it was because of Sam. Angelina's so noble. ^_~ And I also liked how Angelina stayed with Fred when he was in the Hospital Wing. Poor Fred. Loved the ending though! Well done, Jayde!
~Ashliegh
P.S.- and your weclome for reviewing the final chapter of "Horny Juice" =) It was my pleasure!

The chapter (which turned out to be the entire story) was a bit too long. I lost interest about half way through, and I had to force myself to continue reading. Up until the middle, the story was somewhat enjoyable, but then the action seemed to tamper off or at least seemed less important.
Your writing style is about average, and leaves much to be desired. It contains no special phrasing or anything that would grab and hold my attention.
Instead of switching around from third person to first person p.o.v., you should simply use thoughts to communicate a character's feelings. It becomes quite confusing when you jump around both this way and from past to present. Also, I can't help you just threw Harry in there for a one-liner. I know he's on the Quidditch team, but he's not integral to the plot and could have been left out.
One more thing, please do not jump in to coment in the story. If you must comment, please put it in a far off area where it doesn't interfere with the action of the story. It is very distracting for an author to comment as you have, and detracts from the story.