Deep - and beautiful. I can't fully comprehend all of it, but I don't necessarily care or feel that I have to to still be able to appreciate it. Very haunting.

Nice touch, very descriptive. It captures their escense fairly well.

That whole song reminds me of Neil Gaiman's Sandman series in its surreal, beautiful way. Youv'e got a real gift for songs, Akhlys! Are you going to make any more?
Ciao,
Akita

I've been spamming a bit and telling some of the writers on ff.net's Taken page about this, too - my friend and I made a Taken fanfiction site with some boards, and it would be pretty cool to have some of your work on the site. So check it out at http://w.angel-allison.com and maybe I'll see you there. :)
-Merc

very cool! is this a poem? cause it sounds like it could be an awsome song! i got a tune in my head for it already. lol.

You are amazing. And there's nothing like a good Mary/Chet poem at two in the morning. Keep it up!