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| Reviews for BabyJuliard Disastar! |
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   BellaVision 10/4/11 . chapter 2Continue. |
| My Personal Rose 11/23/08 . chapter 2 I lvoe the storyline, and the idea... but I think maybe you should add a bit mre detail to whats going on when people are saying things. I wanna know whats going on around them, how they're feeling, who randomly shouts at Sarah to shut up, that kind of thing. Just think of that when ur writing your next chapter. |
| wuteva4eva456 8/3/06 . chapter 2 Okay. You really need to use more description. I'd also think that Sara would already have figured out that she's pregnant sooner than 3 months later. I'd say after she missed her first period. Derek is slightly out of character, and Sara is WAY out of character. You made her scream when she gets her blood drawn, while she's been a dancer for many many years who must deal with bleeding or broken toes and bad ankles? That would all hurt more than having just a little vile of blood taken from her. A nurse would also never tell a patient to shut up. |
| Jess 6/19/06 . chapter 2 That was dreadful. It's too fast, and generally poor. |
| vampirediva07 5/12/06 . chapter 2 please write more...i beg of you. this is such a good story. word of advice, more description and perhaps sara and derek's thoughts on the situation. |
| Sophinna 2/5/06 . chapter 2 Some of the punctuation is a little off, but who cares, I love it! |
| holly 11/20/05 . chapter 1 i think that keep writing...i lo0ve the story and i would like to know what going happen next... |
| Stacia Hayes- Jackson 9/29/05 . chapter 1 I really like the story because it really means something to me. I hope to read some more of youe stories! Peace and much luv to ya! |
| OTHlover04 12/8/04 . chapter 2 update soon! |
| MoonPrincess568 11/1/04 . chapter 2 love it! update asap! |
| Charma 10/11/04 . chapter 1 I wanted to keep reading. It was a good twist, keep writing it |
| angelic-faerie 8/6/04 . chapter 2 your story is very very good do continue |
| Rock and Sarcasm 8/1/04 . chapter 2 ok that was really out of character. I mean no one would be like i got into juliard and then realy randomly just state that they missed there period nad that they might be pregnant! and NO nurse would ever say "shut up your not the only one in this hospital". and it doesnt hurt that much to draw blood so NO ONE should be screaming. you should really try to make the characters more and character and more true to life, but other than that the plot is good! |
| Forever03 6/16/04 . chapter 1 I think you rated it didn't say nothing about when she had the oppertunity to get pregnet. |
| Dancergrl 6/14/04 . chapter 2 I liket his story alot so please update it I would really really appreciate it. Thanks |
