 Unicorn13 2004-01-18 . chapter 1Very, very, very good! You should be extremely proud of this, because it's absolutely fantastic. The only small problem I had with it was that you seemed to mix your sophisticated flow of language with Harry and Hermione's. Of course, being too casual is deadly, but being too stiff is a bit overboard, you know? But I really liked this. Good job!
-Unicorn13 |