It was definitely vivid. I loved the way you so casually incorporated their regular lives with a mission; in the end, I felt like I was just following Youji around on a regular day (a really angst messed-up day, but still ar egular day).

You've captured everyone's personality to a T, although I can't imagine Aya playing video games (unless I read that scene wrong, or maybe my mind just went off when I read "video game" and "Aya" in the same paragraph). The only thing I'm a little confused about is the ending. Why did Persia kill the boy? I have answers in my mind, but to me they're not satisfactory. Consdusing ending and all, I wouldn't change your story at all. It's good to know there's such talented writers in this fandom!

That was somewhat confusing. It was also very sad. When you chang scenes it needs to be more definete. Cause I had trouble telling when the scene changed.

That's really good. Keep up the good work. Ja ne.

That was good. It's one of the very few Yohji fics I like.. You did a really good job D

I just love this story...it's one of the few WeiB Kreuz stories that I've read that actually made me cry (thank you_). Plus it's one of the Yohji fics that is my all time favorite. Nice job_

I love Yohji-angst. *sigh* This story is wonderful. TON of editing? Maybe a little, but not a ton.

i luv it! and i demand a sequel... please?

* starts to bawl * such a sweet story ! i have never found Yohji so lovable before ! Such a sad story ! Even though the authors of this sad story say it needs editing , I say it's just fine * bawls even harder * It's not wierd but such a sad , sad story.

Holy Jeezus! I am totally.. flabbegasted, amazed.. wow! That was such a great story! So very well written too. Like a weird mystery detective novel thing. I truly enjoyed it! Thanks for writing this nice piece of fanfiction! Now i won't look at butterfly pens and ducks in the same manner! Arigato! -V Ja ne!