this was a wonderful little one shot here!

BL

*claps* I liked that story. ^^ It was very good, but very short. It'd be extremly interesting if you had writen about Maphunde's journey to the Pridelands with more description and make the story longer. But again, I really liked it!

this sounds good, are you going to continue it? i like it! please review my chapter 13, too!

Wow, very good. I can see, you're really talented in writing Lion King stories. ;) "For it takes a pride, not just a king to rule a kingdom!" That was a beautiful line!

very good, i like this, but plz tell me ur going to add more? or at least keep writing, with talent like that, it would be a shame if u didn't keep writing. other than that, tho great story, update soon!
Bambi

It was awsome! I really enjoyed it and can't wait for the real story. You need to write a whole lot faster. Just kindign can't wait till the rest. Our english teachers would be proud you did not use the word "like". :-)

Hi!
That was really good! Can't wait to see what you have planned!
Great story, explains how the pride lands came to be!

Very good! =3 Short, but very well written.
It seems to me that with this storyline, "The Lion King"'s ending was like the repeating of history; that happens a lot in real life history, whether we notice it or not. I don't know why, but I found it interesting to have the Battle of Luna Rock (in story) to be very similar to Battle of Pride Rock (in movie). =3 I'm odd in that sense.
But there was one mistake, I think; in the paragraph that says: "I am the son of a king! But it is with the humble heart of a lion that I persist on helping you. Do not be a fool and surrender to certain death! Make a stand with me! I will dethrone Kupa." I don't think the character Saak ever mentioned King Kupa's name before that. =\ But I have a very short attention span, but I think there was a mistake.
Anyhow, very good and I enjoyed reading it. =3 I hope to read more of your work!