Please, please, PLEASE get a beta! The story was often difficult to follow when you use so many words incorrectly. 'chocking' means to place chock blocks behind a wheel to keep it from rolling downhill. 'choking' means to cut off someone's air. 'Remand' means to hold a suspect in jail pending trial, 'remind' means to cause someone to remember. You kept using 'how' (in what manner) for 'what', and 'strain' for 'strand' (as of hair...a strain of music is just a bit of the song, or else a strain means to struggle, as in straining to reach the top shelf, or to overstretch, as in straining a muscle - a strand of hair is like a lock of hair, a small group of hairs that cling naturally together), constraining in place of contracting, conscious instead of conscience, lever instead of level...it goes on and on. A beta will help you avoid such pitfalls and help you make your stories much more readable. I'm still wondering why Sara and Gil split up, but enjoyed the scenes where they missed each other and especially the ending.

I enjoyed this story immensely. I hope we see more of Evelyn.

It's worth waiting for. I like it. I can't wait for more. Please don't let so long for the next chapter.

Ohh.. could it be that Grissom is Evelyn's half-uncle? Coouuldd it? Well.. I guess I'll just have to wait and find out... but don't leave me waiting too long!! Can't wait for more!!

Very interesting story. I like how Sara and Evelyn seem to be bonding. I hope Sara pursues her theory about Grissom and Evelyn's father. Looking forward to more.

Very good casefile and I'm really enjoying the character of Evelyn.
Is there possibly a relationship then between her and Grissom? Is Evelyn's father maybe Grissom's father or maybe his brother?

Interesting story, I hope it wil be updated soon...

your an amazing writer...update soon

this is so sad, yet so beautiful at the same time. Am I a masochist? probably... loved the way you described the emotions gris was experiencing in that powerful moment he shared with sara in his office. I really hope they find a way to find that peace and quiet they deserve again. And wonderful job with the case as well. It's still gripping! Can't wait for the next installment. :)

I am getting curious about where this is leading and what Evelyn is going to say to Grissom and Sara about Grissom looking like her dad. Will she tell or will Sara find out and tell Grissom. Interesting storyline.

That was very good. Evelyn is such a sad soul. I hope you have a happier ending in store for all of them...including G/S ;D

Ohh! Don't leave us there!! I can't wait to see Grissom's reaction!! Such an amazing job...

Can i ask a question or few? Why isn't Sara and Grissom together?? did something happen to them b/c it sounds like they were together but not anymore. So Sara's the supervisor now? what about grissom? Sorry i'm just a little confused. Great story by the way :D very well written.

ohmygod. This story is amazing! somehow I only discovered it last night, so had the pleasure of reading all 5 chapters back to back... they're both so in character, the case is fascinating, and your own creation, Evelyn, is such a wonderfully intriguing character! The relationship between gris and sara is wonderfully portrayed here, and I'm still trying to understand what happened with those two, and get the new chain of command... the fact they're both still yearning for each other is breaking my heart. I just hope they can make it right and save each other. Again.

This is very interesting. I'm curious to see where it's going. Totally in character.
Write faster! :-)
Shannon