That was hilarious, never saw it coming! And people need to get over themselves and DEAL WITH IT! This barely scarred me, I've read and heard worse. :D

I agree with Sheba, that was completely disgusting, but funny

blargh

That was disgusting. It might have been original but it was still disgusting. I agree with Sheba on this story. hehe, only joking, i liked it

It's very Garet. Weird but...good job. ^_^

Okay. The pairing is gross. And this fanfic is not realistic at all. I can tell you just wrote this to scar peoples' brains, and it clearly wasn't meant to be a quality fanfic. So, the constructive criticism people are giving you is pretty redundant. Anyway...

Nice job on scarring people. It's hilarious to see that so many people flamed your butt off, when you were just having a bit of fun. But... please... try... to be a bit more tasteful and realistic. The thought of them kissing is disturbing.

Okay, let me just first applaud you for attempting a very different and unorthodox pairing. I like to see odd pairings. Also, your style is very nice. Coherent and succinct, with a touch of sarcasm, which suits Garet's character well.

That being said, the pairing itself wasn't very well executed in this fic. I won't go into other details of what I didn't like about this fic, like the aspects of the modern worlds such as the hair gel and such that are out of place (in my opinion) in a seemingly medieval setting as Weyard. I'm not a regular romance fic writer or reader--I was sent this fic by a friend of mine. Here's my tips for you; do what you will with it.

Character development isn't a very strong part of Golden Sun. It's up to you to pull out something to personally develop your versions of the characters. If you can figure out their personalities, you'll have something going to create a chemistry between them. In this case, Garet's a bit easier because he fits into a common stereotype. But Dora is harder, because you don't see much of her in the game. She's a sad soul, obviously, but there's got to be more to her than that. Grief is a complex emotion. Once you figure out their characters, you can come up with the rationalizations for their love for each other. The justification for their romance was next to nil in this particular fic, and for an out-there couple like this, having just seemingly random declarations of love is a big no-no.

If you wanted to explore this pairing further, you may want to try aging Garet and Dora a bit. Set it when Garet is an adult. From there, figure out a situation that could place the two together. Did Kyle actually die this time from an illness or another freak accident? Did he run off with another woman? Or is Dora bored in their marriage? Etc., etc. And what about Garet? Why would he like Dora so much, or be attracted to her? I really think that this pairing could have potential, but it will be damn hard to execute without a thorough understanding of who these two characters are and why they would fall for each other.

Again, I give you kudos for the daring experiment, but all in all, this attempt fell flat. However, keep on writing: you have a lot of potential.

For gods sake everyone, get over it! I thought it was a good fic, I mean, even if I don't like the pairing that doesn't mean its not great.
I say: keep up your good writing, and don't listen to those stupid - who are flaming you.

I read this a long time ago, and I never reviewed. I was reminded of it when a friend of mine said she was going to write a Garet/Dora fic. I support her completely.

Honestly, people need to open their minds more. This was not sick or disturbing to me in any way. Then again, I'm not easily disturbed, and I write stuff just as bizarre. In any case, I applaud you for your use of originality. We need more original pairings in this fandom. This was great.

WTF! WHAT KIND OF SICK,TWISTED,PERVERTED KIND OF PERSON ARE YOU! THIS PUT SO MANY DISTURBING IMAGES IN MY MIND I LOST MY LUNCH!

That. Was. Wrong. Why would it be Dora? Why? WHY? Why not something normal? Dora's what, 40 or something? And Garet's what, 15? Think about that for a while, and when you're done, you're invited to come back down to Earth.

I'm with Sheba, personally. The thought of Garet with Dora is just too wrong an idea for me to get around...The writing itself wasn't bad though. I'm just prejudiced toward this idea in it's entirety.

This story need serious improving.

Um, I think it's kinda pointless I'm confused about the whole thing... ?_?

This is ** up, totally and entirely ** up.
Never do this ** again, in fact, never WRITE again.
I'm going to hunt you down and kick your ** for this crap that has polluted FF.N