that was such a really, really beautiful story! I'm sorry I haven't reviewed before but I couldn't stop reading!I like the way the story developed. Nothing was to fast, you took your time. It was a very different story from all the others I read. At first I thought it would be a story full of cliche's but it turned out to be the other way around. Good job.

One question. Will hermoine be an apprentice? I really want to know!

You tell him Salazar! Wooo!

Severus' irrational anger has always made me irrationally irritated.

(Ok, so I might be rationally irritated, but having two 'ir' words together sounded cooler.)

Love your story so far!

Are you evergoing to start part 3 to this series.

Just read these two Fics over the past two days, and loved every chapter! Normally I hate Fics where Harry's name is changed! But this was done perfectly. Even though he changed name you still kept the links to Harry! I've enjoyed this so much! One of my all time favourite! And just to spite the haters! Loved the chapter lengths! Was a perfect story! Xxx

I adore this story. This sequel is even better than the first story and I didn't think that was possible. I'm really looking forward to reading the next part. I often find that after reading a good book that one scene really sticks with me. In this case it was when the Slytherins all left the great hall as though off to join Voldemort, only for the majority of them to come back after disposing of the death eaters. Thank you for sharing this story and not only entertaining me for three days, but also for making me think, it's very rare that I find something that makes me see things from a different perspective.

Thank you very much for writing and completing such an engaging story. Personally, I have no problem with your chapter lengths, though I admit that's probably because I'm approaching from it from a point where I'm not having to wait for the next installment as it is completed. Whenever I write a story, the chapters seem to be similar length. It's somewhere between 1000 and 3000 words, isn't it? Considering that most essays are considered stupidly long if they're over 4000 words, it kinda puts these 'short' chapters into perspective, doesn't it?

As for grammar and spelling, I have to say that I'm full of admiration at your ability to write in a second language to this standard. I know that I couldn't do the same in French, and I'm considered reasonably fluent. Believe me, I've come across far worse examples of grammar-mangling by people who, by the flag in their profile, should have English as a first language. I'm sure you've found the same, or else you've been very lucky. The number of times I've laughed at someone's homophone mix-up or despaired at their reprehensible grammar... It sometimes makes me want to take a red pen and scribble all over a printed copy and then send it to them. Yours, however, only has a few lapses here and there, something forgivable in anyone. I can't think of any at present.

I very much enjoyed the relationship between Harry/Alec, Severus and Albus. I must say that I was waiting for some school child to start calling Alec, 'Smart-Alec', playing on his name and his intelligence. I'm glad that Salazar told Severus beforehand as it would have damaged their relationship badly, if not destroyed it, if Severus had blown up and started ranting about 'that spoiled, arrogant Potter'.

Thank you again for taking all this time to write such an enjoyable read. I hope you enjoy reading this review.

you did a wonderful job at finishing this chapter. I got teary eyed when the slytherins came back in and showed their love and respect for Severus

At first, the Potions Master hadn't thought it would be very fair, but Dumbledore had made it clear that he would let the student body know that Alec was his grandson and that as such, he had some privileges.

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I like your story, but this is just bull shit.

I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed your story! I think you have a real gift for making people care about the characters. I really loved how you developed the relationship between Harry and Dumbledore as well as Harry and Severus over the two stories. It was amazing watching them bond and become a family.

If you ever decide to come back to these stories and write about Harry's adventures as an apprentice, I will be first in line to read it!

thanks that was a good time of reading .

Your rant was completely justified! I think your chapters are plenty long, and your update speed must have been plenty fast, since you have 46 chapters in this fic and you finioshed it in a year. Most professional authors don't get that much done so quickly.

I really liked reading this. I think that you managed to portray Harry really well and that developing parental relationship between Harry and Dumbledore and Harry and Severus was really nice to follow. It was nice to see Severus portrayed as a good guy rather than a villain. That relationship btw. Severus and Slytherin house itself was also a really nice component of the fic. Great job!

that was so awsome ifially got t finish reading the sequel! i loved it so much and damn i love al your fics they are jst so great!

First of all, I just want to say that I love this story and the one before it. It's one of the cutest depictions of Harry that I've read.

I just wanted to point out one thing in this chapter that kinda bothered me. I don't usually nitpick, but for some reason, I can't let this one go.

Lan, or Melanie, is not a teenager, she's 11. So when Harry is wondering why he is so comfortable with her clinging to his arm, and his explaination to himself is that she is a teen just like him, it doesn't make sense.

Second, Melanie is Colin and Denis Creeveys' younger sister, so I assume she must have the same last name as them. So why is it that she is still clinging to Harry's arm when his name is called, when she should already be sorted and sitting with her new house? They go in alphabetical order during the sorting, so it doesn't make sense that Harry, under the pseudonym Alexander Dumbledore, would be sorted before Melanie Creevey.

And one other thing, more like a suggestion. When writing from Snape's point of view, you should probably refrain from referring to Alec as a "teen". As far as Sev is concerned, Alec is only 11, and describing him as a "child" when writing from Severus's point of view would be much more appropriate, and would make a lot more sense.

Sorry to go on a rant like this. I really like your story, and I'm going to move on to the next chapter after this, but I just had to get that off my chest. Little mistakes like that just tend to distract me from the overall story, and I just wanted to point them out to you.

Great story! I'mma continue reading, now. :)

Love Web of Lies series! Its really good! You spelled some things wrong but its really rare.