great story

I can only agree with TeacherTam. That story had me sobbing out loud, too.
The poem you used at the end, was read at my best friends funeral (in german, 'though), two years ago and I thought I would never hear/read it again...*sniffles*.
That was one very moving piece of fiction.
Very well done.

I have lost too many loved ones in the last few years, and this has me sobbing. Out-loud sobbing. You're a very powerful writer, and this poem is one that we had at one of the services. It's beautiful. You made a wise choice, when you decided to use it in your story. If people weren't crying before they read the poem, they certainly would be after.

Errmm...this story started out good, but when you got to "Ryan tried to stress the passion he felt with his words.." it started getting sappy. Try and tone down it down a bit next time.

you should really write another chapter. good though!

This was so good...good job.