I am enjoying this fic. Have not gotten to your last written chapter but am looking forward to it.

I like the story. This could have possibilities. Can't wait for new chapters.

Good chapter.

Okay.. It's a cute concept, but it's lacking in execution..

It's hard to follow your story. You don't have much description, mostly dialogue. Occasionally you'll mention that someone walked here or said something in a certain manner, but that's it. You should weave location and setting into your story.. not break up your very short chapters with intros like "Here" "Earlier..." "Infirmary"

What you have, really, very largely a script put into diagloge form.. And you don't even identify who's talking most of the time..

It's an enjoyable tale.. But make it a *story.* Write longer chapters, include more description, and make sure you don't fall back into the (A/N) in the middle of sentences, paragraphs, or scenes habit again like you were doing at the beginning of the story. It's distracting and unnessary. You think something is goofy that you wrote? Talk about it at the end, don't put a call out in the middle of the sentence. It kills the flow.

"I glare in your general direction!" Yep, defenately sounds better when it's "I fart in your general direction!" Great chapter.

Good chapter.

Great story. Please write more soon.

Good chapter.

Great chapter. It proves that Sam really does have Jack wrapped around her finger - if she can get him to get Janet with just a look.

Yes, you're eviller than Anubis to dangle that little bit and leave it off there! :)

ok i only just started reading ur story but i'd say u should have 2 or 3 babies

Good chapter.

I think she should have female triplets.

Lost track of this one, but I'm glad to see it again!
Make those chapters longer, please! unless you intend to drag it out...
Well written, fast paced despite the short chapters.

This is coming along really well, I really like all of your twists and turns. I can't wait to see what happens next. Write more soon please!