Interesting story, will you continue?

Hi, I finally read the rest of the chapters! You know "rimon" means pomogranate, right? Just checking. I like that you have your brothers in there. Good job all around. ^__^

I like how the story is progressing outside of LOTF. I want to see what happens with the war. Write more! ^_^

Hey, neat chapter. You have some punctuation errors, not that important. Some questions-why did she go after the glasses if she had a cigarette lighter? And expletive isn’t an adjective. And bugger off can’t be that much worse than the language Ary uses all the time, so why does Seal care? Anyway, overall it’s good. Keep writing!

Hiya. This is much better now that you listened to me and made Ary a decent person! ^__^
Anyway, yah...vey different from the book. Piggy not being important, Simon living, Ben and Sam on the island (heh heh heh...hey, I thought they were in military school!) Who was the dead body anyway?
The one thing that seems weird is Ary dismissing the dead body as unimportant-wouldn't she care if someone was killed? Also, something I missed; is Seal the same person as Celebrinor? It seems like it.
I like this story cause it's like all the little things that went wrong in the book you fixed. Like when we were reading it i English, i was like "No! Don't do that!" And in your story they don'. And yet, there's still conflict. Good job. Write more! ~_^

I like it!! I like the changes from LOTF - like Piggy is a minor character. And your brothers are there!! What'ya goin to do to them? *evil laugh* Please finish!

Ary, I'm sorry it took me so long to get a chance to look at these, because they are amazing! I have had so much fun reading them and can't wait until you have everything done. You've done such a great job of engaging with the text in your own unique, creative way. I love your dialogue and descriptions. I'm so glad you enjoy writing so much and you should definitely keep doing it, because you're fantastic and you're only going to get better with time! --Miss G.

This is a good story. I like it. There's a slight typo at the end of the last chapter.