I do hope that you will one day continue this story it is very good and inspiringly written. I would very much like to see more of it.. Although i do wonder if this was the original intent to add in SF however if it was or not it was beauitfully done and adda a great deal to the the flow and background of this story. i look forward to reading more of your writing.

WOW! I LOVE THIS STORY, MUY BUENO! YOU DID A SUPERB JOB ON THE PLOT! UPDATE REAL SOON!

your story was better with the lyrics in it the way it was before.

Hm.

Ranma, just after learning the Amaguriken, is capable of kicking Ryoga, who is superhumanly strong, into a cliff wall with enough force to shatter it, as I recall. That's just his STRENGTH. His speed is a lot better than that. Your Ranma is much stronger now. Yet he seems quite weak.

Also, the guitar is bad. I happen to love the guitar, I play myself. But it has no place in this story, just like the music and the song titles in particular. Why did you say it was Green Day? It seems awkward, out of place and almost self-conscious, and is altogether a terrible idea. I read your response to a reviewer who criticized this stuff earlier, and you appear to be the sort of stiff-necked writer who won't accept criticism (...until you write something, and make it worth reading, you have no right to tell me how to spin a tale...). I'll have you know that a good writer will listen to the most insulting criticism, even when it's just "I don't like this," and weigh it against his writing.

Also, it is not true that only a writer is fit to criticize writing. In point of fact, writing does not necessarily make you a good critic. It's true that that guy's review wasn't especially helpful, but it was quite accurate. Why do you think you pretty much never see songfics outside fanfiction? It's because any writer worth publishing knows that it's a bad idea. It can maybe be pulled off if you're absolutely amazing, which you are not. For an excellent example of what NOT to do, look at the book Battle Royale - it happens to be exceptionally bad, and you can find in there some utterly random Springsteen songs. And even that is considerably more germane to the topic than what you have done here.

Sorry about that, but it offends me as a fairly poor writer and long-time reader to see honest criticism rebuffed without consideration.

I'm afraid the whole song thing is very bad. I don't care how much you like them, it's still bad. No, it's not a matter of opinion - Linkin Park is not relevant to Ranma, and that makes the story bad. The funny thing is that you're a decent writer otherwise.

excellent story you have here

these 8 chapters were a nice read. please update as soon as possible.

Excellent story! I agree, it seemed like a dark fic in the beginning, but the mood's getting lighter, you keep an excellent balance of the darker and lighter aspects of the story, making it hover right there at the edge - I love it!

Your characters develop well, you depict Ranma's growth in particular very well, I like the way you deal with his inner conflicts in inflections and inner monologues. His chats with Reiko are interesting, as well, and only add to his development.

Your flashback scenes are few and far between, the ones that exist, however, contribute exceptionally to the storyline.

What I'm kind of missing, however, is where you left Ranko? I mean, she seemed pretty important up until...chapter 4 or 5, I think? You had scene changes in the beginning, with Ranma writing to Nodoka, Nabiki, and Kasumi, but I haven't seen Ranko mentioned anywhere after Ranma left the Tendo dojo, just wondering what happened to her? Oh, and just out of personal curiousity, what was up with the MP3 player she gave Ranma all the way at the beginning?

Since I don't really know much about Street Fighter, I can't really comment on those parts, but from what little I do know, I like the way you portray Sakura and Chun-Li.

I'm really looking forward to the upcoming chapters, this is looking to be a great story with the best yet to come!

P.S.: I'm really looking forward to your explanation of how Ranma masters the Neko-Ken. (Haven't seen too many of those ;)

interesting story, just saw it today and read all of it

i'm curious just where you plan on taking it considering the pace you've set with the introduction of new elements

Shinku Hadouken is litterally "True Emptiness Wave Path Fist". The Ken is the same ken as in kenpo, fist, and not ken for sword.

I'm really looking forward to the fight with Bison, should be awesome if the way you're writing is an indication. This chapter had a lot of greamt moments in it, Ranma having fun at his job, thee moment with he and the spy, and Bisons reaction to the point that Ken's on his way. Looking forward to the next part.

I personally don't like the integration into Street Fighter but its your story and I won't presume to tell you how to write it. I will just sit back and continue to enjoy a great story. If you wouldn't mind could you e-mail me when the next parts come out(Rockgolem@}?

Love the story but wish you would update soon can't wait to see the next chapter.

It's an interesting story, having not read any street fighter I'm not familar with those characters so I can't really comment on them. As for Ranma, I've seen other stories where he has another 'person' running around in his head, but you've put your own spin on it and it works.

The first chapters made me suspect that this was going to be a rather dark fic, however the later ones have reversed that somewhat. To me it is now coming across a great deal lighter, while still keeping a dark undercurrent.

As to the songs, eh, I just read them and continue on. For me they neither add nor detract from the overall read. Your story, do what you want.

I enjoyed the letters to Nodoka, thought they were a nice touch, him staying in touch with some of the folks back in Nermia. Have you dropped that idea?

Offhand I can't recall any story where he was slowly losing control of the Nekoken has he is in your story. That's slightly different twist which is interesting and adds to the story.

Character wise Ranma is the only one that you seem to be developing, and not that quickly either, which is fine. When you started out he appeared to be about one step away from becoming a berzerker and now, in chapter 8 he is looking out for the greater good of mankind.

That said he still seems a little on the two dimensional side to me. While his story interests me, it has never really reached out and truly grabbed my attention. While good, I find the story lacking an emotional impact. While the dark portion at the beginning was emotional it came too soon for there for me to have anything invested in the story.

Some examples of what I mean above can be found in William "Thundergod" Nichols Odessey, a TM story on FF, or White Rose by Aondehafka, to name a few.

Others writers, such as Hung Nnguyen 'Animeaddiction' have the ability to make me laugh out load with their tales. Rune Soldier Ranma is an excellent example of this. Other works by him, such as Tattoon are a darker, yet it is one where the characters are gripping and have an intensity that pulls you into the story. They get me 'invested' into the story, be it for laughs or tears. They are ones that I can return to time and again and even when rereading still receive a great deal of enjoyment from them.

Writing wise pretty good, however you do occasionally drop a word or tenses and I've found a few spelling errors but not enough to detract from the overall read.

All and all an entertaining read, I enjoyed what you've posted to date and look forward to following this story further. Keep plugging away you'll get there.

One word. Update.