Oh, that was just too cute! I really wish more people would write Jiraiya fictions. D=

I wrote one, but it isn't this pairing, it's incredibly angsty Kakashi/Jiraiya, but I'm not a member here so it's on aff and on ...

cant... unread!

hilarious! and a little sad at the samee time.

oh how lovely =}

good work

Wow, didn't see that one coming, nice one. Can't really see Gaara letting that happen, but, then again... actually, I've changed my mind, I can see this happening if only for want of human contact. Nicely, darkly twisted.

That was different. I liked it alot. Keep writing more. You're doing really well.

I like it. It's very well written and it doesn't give too much away. Very good job!

Hmm..Naruto, Jiraiya and Gaara? I think I may just write one...but it'll be at least a week or so. But I compliment you on your story. And such a nice ending. He (Gaara, my fav.) shows his caring in such little yet big ways.

~Naitachal6~

Fluffy and very good! This place needs more of this pairing *hint hint* ^.~

OMG! After reading Hiding Places, I went to see if you wrote any other stories with JiraiyaGaaraNaruto as the pairing and, lo and behold, comes the companion fic! I really enjoyed how you periodically switched between present and past. It made the story flow beautifully, and really made you pay attention! I loved naruto's comment: "Gaara, there's sand in the bed." I can totally imagine that happening! So, once again, salutes for you!
*Tom*

Your writing style is a tad sloppy. You change between the past and present tense several times, and that disrupts the flow of the story. You can get away with those tense changes in dialogue, but not in the actual story itself.

Also, you lack detail. Your story relies on the dialogue to carry it, and that's not a good habit. If there's a few lines of this every now and then in a longer story, it doesn't disrupt the flow and you can get away with it. In a short story, however, lack of detail can easily mean lack of story altogether.

All in all, though, it's a fairly decent story. If you revise it, taking my points into account, it will strengthen the story quite a bit.

as a final note, the drunk idea is heavily overdone. I would suggest finding a new plot bunny for your next story.

I like it a lot. I've never thought about this pairing, but the two fics you've done on this threesome makes sense and brings out some really interesting similarities between the three nins.
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Hopefully you'll write more of this and maybe turn these ficcies into random life-sort of series. It'll be good, I'll bet. I love mild, psychologic-centered series like these.
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Love from CN

"Briefly, Gaara considers whether he should attempt to drag them inside or leave them out there to get what’s coming to them in the form of several angry neighbors with sticks." and "Gaara, there's sand in the bed." Those just struck me as so funny...I'm glad you made Gaara more human and you included the sorely neglected Jiraiya. I like their little relationship. Certainly unique. Great job!

Naruke: XD Me luffed it!
Shikamaru: Hai!

XD Yay! I needed something with my buddy Jirai in it just now and I must say that I like this^^ Hangovers suck, but drinking is fun to use to drown out sucky things^^; Bleh, I don't know what to say~! XÞ But keep writing!...FOREVER! BWAHAHAHA!!