YES! YES! I LOVE FICS THAT EMBRACE THE IDEA OF 'GOOD' VERMIN!

Wow this is really sad but good! I love your writing Kayla! Keep on writing the way you do!

Wow...that was a really deep fanfic. I'm not too surprised that the otter tried to kill the fox; Otters struck me as too greedy and wanting to kill off vermin with no question or doubt. But...wow...what three minutes of reading that was...

~Snuffie

it was cool
too much drama though

wow! that was so good!

Aw! Awesome story! Taht's erally sad- the ending. Good job!

Tristic

Really,really deep. Thats all I can say.

I think you did a pretty good job with this story. I've always loved the idea of a good vermin character. In fact, my favorite character from all of the Redwall books was Blaggut, the searat who killed his captain in The Bellmaker because his captain had murdered Mellus. Sometimes I think that Brian Jacques needs more characters like that.
The skipper in your story was a bit vermin-ish, but I guess he was just trying to protect his holt. An overall good story.

Waah... it's so sad... Made me want to cry. Good job; looking forward to more.

Good story! Very deep...

how sad! *tear* i love it though! really makes u think...
i love ur descriptions! very nice job!

Skippers accent was weird, but I think it was well written.Cept even badgers let vermin go even if they did do something and i love skipper.not yours,bj.

gods, this is really good. Keep writing. You write like Brian Jacques, though you're style is slightly different. Beautifully written

Wow. That's a sad story. And while I can't bring myself to agree with murder, I can't really be mad at the otter for doing what he thought he needed to. Although I'm not sure he deserves to be forgiven, he probably shouldn't be hated, either.
There's not much I can offer in terms of criticism, except that the otter's accent seemed a little bit off. I can't say how specifically, though.
Anyway, this was a good story. Not much else I can say.

Nice concept, it provokes a lot of thought. I like your display, except I think I like the assurity that all vermin are bad... It's nice to think that BJ established one fact that we can always fall back on, its comforting... almost. I usually don't like when Foxes and the such are portrayed as kind and nice and stuff, cus it throws off that fact, but this I could stand because it was realistic, it /could/ happen BJ just never /lets/ it happen. I've been happy to note (although maybe I'm missing something) that BJ's characters never actually attack before the vermin give them a reason to. Nonetheless, I liked this, although I don't think the mouse had to die, just a wound or something. I really don't like death *shudders* I'm glad you're not doing a sequel, this was better off on its own. And it was GOOD!
-Cat