pretty good so far, good setup, good grammar/spelling, and you seem to have a good grasp of the charachters. lemme ask, did you read the book, or just watch the movie? (no offence or anything) i look foreward to seeing how the story goes.

That was awesome! Please make an Epilouge, this couple is to cute to be forgetten!! lol

normally i adore your books, but this one i'm mildly obsessive with. i keep thinking about it and picturing Carrie's death in my mind and laughing evily. lol great job!

Ah, such a perfect ending! Kind of sucks that Carrie died but she was trying to get Zig away from Squid so it's an acceptable loss. Nice job!

I like this a lot so far. On to read more.

wow that was different, thought there would be more action, I like how you killed carie off, nice touch- not really, wat wpould have happened if she stayed alive?

Aw, so sweet. I love slash, my favourite type is CavemanZero.

Epilogue.
Yes!
=D

Pfft. Who she think she is? Kissin him.
Lol.
Kidding.
Great chapter.

That was so cute!

This is good. Keep going. Yes I enjoyed it.

i love the story so much. but in my opinion i think it could have been dirtier and a little more detail.but im just perverted like that.lol plz post an epilouge!

Yes most definently write an epilogue. Great stoy loved it!

aww how cute! great job

aw! i love stories with zig zag in em!! brilliant... but carrie dying was a bit over the top. i dont like putting that in, but its just a thought, not that i can think of any alterniative atm... but really bloomin lovely story =]