Well, I really enjoyed this take on arranged marriages but was a little disappointed at the end. Read below to see why.

I loved the wedding sequences. Brilliant descriptions! I want one of the portraits of Harry and Snape! Draco and Ron were cute together too. I'm glad you incorporated several different scenarios for contrast (DracoRon, HermSeamus, HarrySev). I could really feel all the pain Harry was going through and Sev was lashing out in agitation too. Good writing.

My biggest complaint though is that you took 26 chapters to get through all the wedding week and then only 4 chapters for the rest of the semester! I was hoping for just as many chapters showing Harry and Severus slowly coming to grips with their relationship. Throw in some more Death Eater meetings. Have the confrontation with Remus and Sirius. Let Sev save Harry from something OR Sev could do something ultra nice for Harry, then they could have a moment and start going on dates. Sneak Dumbledore back into the picture with memories of Snape's past for Harry to view. There's lots of ways you could have kept going to develop their love life. It just felt like you got tired writing.

I was also looking forward to the drama in the sequel but you haven't done anything with it either.

On a different note, I didn't like letting Petunia come back with them to the magical realm. It didn't feel like her personality. Yes, she had been envious of Lily's magical abilities and of Lily and now Harry for their belonging to that world. After so many years of that bitterness, she would not have instantly turned around and embraced it. Dudley on the other hand I could see you bringing into the wizarding world as a type of stepchild of the Snapes much the way Harry was of the Dursleys. THAT would be an interesting read.

Sorry for the long critique. The story was great! I just wanted a lot more of it. No, I have not read the new version of this tale and I'm not sure I want to--wouldn't want to ruin the images in my head from this one.

Thanks for sharing!

I quite enjoyed this story but to be completely honest I am loving the Revision much more... I was going to wait to read this verision but changed my mind :D lol hurry with the update to the revisoin :D :D pritty prease!!

KCK-Lumcer

Wow. I'll check out the revision.

Woot! This was really good! I love the relationships and the bantering that happened between Harry and Snape. That was really cute. ^_^ Off to read the sequel now!

Oh wow... this is hilarious! I love the idea. However, you need more spaces in between the dialogues please. They're hard to read if they are jammed together. :)

Aw, that's so sweet! I like the fic and I loved L'oReen. I'm also happy you made the Malfoys human though I think Ron and Draco fall in love rather quickly.

OMG! I absolutely loved it!! Hmm are you ever going to do a continuance with the story?

hey, I'm lovin this story so far (and I generally cant stand forced marriage stories) but I've been tryin to follow your links to the uncensored version of this story, I've come across the new version of to have and hold but I want to finish this version first. For some reason the links you've mentioned on your profile just wont work for me, would you send me a link to this version of tHaH (uncensored version) please? Thanks!

very interesting story! I liked it quite a bit, but thought it would be longer. Are you thinking about writting a sequel?

I'm surprised they are all taking it lying down,why isn't anyone just saying hell no i WON'T?

since this story is complete you may not see this review but why would you ruin harry and snape bridal moment no hickeys on his neck nothing things need to be a little warmer for them I have had it I have read enough Snape is to cold to Harry

That is amazing! Finally, Snape stopped being a gi and actually allowed someone to get so close to him (I don't they could get closer) and Ron and Draco are so sweet together!

Just one thing...at the end of a chapter, Dumbledore sounding as though you were gonna sart bashing him (omething along the lines of 'His plans were falling into place'.) If you don't want people to start flaming old Dumbledore, try to keep away from the whole 'his plan' idea.

Well done Lady Shadow; I tip my hat to thee.

Sparkie

I think I am reading two versions of this story?

Are they the same?

Oh well, I guess I will read both through one thing that is bothering me, add more spacing, makes it much easier to read

Hey, are you going to write some sort of sequel?? Or are you going to leave it like this?? :D Love you!! :3

Excuse me...could you please send me those NX-17 Scenes please?? I haven't read any lemons lately (which is a complete lie but just believe me for a sec) and I need some good ones (this is true, most lemons suck orochi's balls at the moment) and I want to read, well, pretty much any lemon. I love this story btw. Please, send me those deleted scenes?? :D