Nice fiction, its very cute!! is megumi in the story ? i hope she is and plaes have her paired up wit sanosuke !! u don't haft to ofcurse but i hope u do!! Again very cute story can'y wait to read more!!

NO FLAMES??! NO FREAKIN' FLAMES! You!
i won't kill you...no...not yet! {deep breath}
ok it's very good, please go on and update soon
ja ne!

This chapter maid much more sence it was very very good. Oh and 4 u first time makin one u did pretty good!

This was a good yet confussing story. Like I said it is good though. I think it needs to be longer for a first chapter.

HI. Wanted to let you know this story has promise. You english is not toobad. Any spelling mistakes you made were minor. Please continue the story.

just...KOROSU!it's very interesting go on.
jane!