interesting. very interesting.
Cheers!from the H.M.S. Catalina

Gomen'nasai. I did not get to finish my review.
And Third, I think that it is hardly fair to judge me so harshly when all YOU are doing is rewriting the ORIGINAL story in your own words. Now, if that's your thing, you go ahead and do your thing, but before you pass judgement on me, take a look at yourself! ^.'
But thanks for the tip. I will try harder. But some advice: Before you can do justice you must find the wrong.
Keep writing and Good Luck!
Yours,
Jupiter Green

Thanks for your review on my story. I want you to know you are the first one out of all my reviews to literally hate it.
First off, let me say that I am a hopeless romantic that likes happy, sappy, all too mushy endings. If you don't like it, I don't care, don't read my stuff.
Second, thank you for submitting your thoughts. As a new member to fanfiction.net I am sure you will learn quick, don't worry.
Third, I think

Interesting. Please continue!

I was just going to see if I can find an adaptation to this game, when I see this at the top of the list. I've seen the intro video, and you described it perfectly. The only thing that could have made this chapter better is if you added music. I needed an adaptation to this game to write another story, and luckily I've found this one. I don't think you need to shorten any of this because you added everything that made the intro movie so majestic. If you took anything out, you would have to take out the whole thing, because it wouldn't fit anymore. The only thing I can complain about is the fact that you didn't say anything about what was on the stained glass floor. You know, what the darkness was covering.

Hey-loo!!
Wowies! Great detail! It sounded exactly like the beginning of the game! U did a great job 4 ur first fic! i just posted mine yesterday 2! it's done ok i guess so far...I thought the title (MY Father is ANSEM) would reel 'em in!
but anywayz! update soon i want 2 find out wat happens next!
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