Excelent story bit of writing. I had been thinking about doing my own. But if you keep writing on this one I'll just have to find my own game to write for. I hate being overshadowed *Grins* Keep 'em coming, please.
Carl

your fan fic is great! I love the way you go through the storyline in every little detail. Kain is my personal favorite character of all the final fantasy's:)and you portray him very well. Your writing stile is magnificent and I cant wait till the next chapter.

Hm... nice. Your writing style is great.

Please update!

Welcome back. I must say, your writing hasn't suffered at all during this forced sabbatical of yours (I have no excuse along the lines of losing my computer to explain my own delays). Waiting for the next chapters will always be painful, which is probably a good sign. Best of luck!

Pfft! Quiet, Spiff, or people might actually *read* my story. I think you're just confusing my work with someone else's great story. ;) Well, anyway, onto your next chapter (which I'm so happy you brought to us, by the way):

I just love the way you opened this chapter. Ah... Good old Kain, a man of action! He rocks many a person's socks. But enough of Kain's goodness... I adore the conversations between Kain and Cecil; it just deepens their relationship (of course, that was probably your intent). Hell, I just plain adore the way you *write* the two. I get kinda sick of some people's interpretations of the two's relationship. I love how you write it, however. They're so brotherly and I just think that's so--excuse me while I go all girlie for a minute--sweet. Cecil's worry and doubt is portrayed brilliantly, in my humble opinion, and the little parts of them reminiscing of their youth is a nice break in-between. And... bah! Beigan needs to be pimp slapped by Cecil.

All and all, this was a great expansion of a part in the game that seemed forgettable. But you've added a great deal of depth to it, so if no one reviews, I'll just have to go and hunt them down. Lazy buggers that we all are. ;)

"Have a fine morning, ladies." Tee hee. I love that.
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Great chapter. You portray Cecil's guilt so well. Hope you update soon

Gah! The angst!

Yes, yes, yes, we *all* love that. I finally got the chance to read this. And... wow. I mean...wow. Sorry, my vocabulary's a bit lacking in words to describe this, so I'll settle with "wow" for the moment. Your writing talents have really grown from the last version (didn't I mention that before somewhere?). Oh, and brilliant and beautiful and all of that business. This chapter reminds me of something I read somewhere... Can't remember. Oh well. *shudders* So dark this be! Great job with Cecil's tortured self.

Anyway, eagerly awaiting the next chapter. *cracks whip* Git writin'!
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Nice, this is actually better than your last one. Hope you update soon

Ya know of all the Final Fantasy games this one would be the best of all to put to novelization.
And you're doing a very good job of it.

I love it. I love how you've developed Cecil's guilt complex, and I like how you've made him into a person, even more so than did the game. (And the game did a pretty darn good job, considering that it's just a video game.) The emotion is great, and I like how you don't hesitate at actually killing Mysidians instead of just sticking them in jail cells in Baron. It makes everything seem more serious than "Oh no, better give them the crystal or they'll magically transport us to Baron!" No, no, now it's "Better give them the crystal or they'll kill us all!" which is *far* better, though sadder. I probably sound cold-hearted now, but I just think it adds to the atmosphere and gives Cecil something to actually feel guilty about.

Nice chapter, as expected. I hope you update soon, I really like this story

I've only had the chance to view the first chapter but it looks very promising. Cecil's feelings are very real--not too whiny and not to standoffish. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Er, what happened to the first one? did it get deleted? oh well, I guess I get to read this all over again.

I like what you have written so far and hope that the rest of your revamped work will be just as good. Though I hope that you will continue writing Pt II as well.

Well i'm glad your writing this its really good i cant wait for some more.