Sorry I cannot say more, but it would take a college professor and Shaespeare effort to adequately explain how wonderful, beautiful, and meaningful this poem is, expecially the last two lines.

I think you've pretty much summed up the nature of the world in a sonnet, which is a pretty remarkable feat. You've managed to keep to the form very well, with no instances of awkwardness that I could see, and I think you definitely get your point across. Very well done!

Red

Yay! This is wonderful. I love Shakespearean sonnets, and this is a good one. Thank you for not overdoing the angst. Your meter seems good too. My only suggestion would be to create a bit more of an introduction in the first few lines, but if that messes you up, don't bother. You've got a great poem there. Good job!