OOOHH! I wanna hurt Trunks TOO! Is Wendy going to tell Gohan about Pan?

Dark and funny at the same time.. very good though.. "grandbrat" is a very very fascinating word..

Eek. Very good so far! Next chapter next chapter..

Wendi, it's great to see someone with a passion for writing about their dreams. I am really impressed with the creativity and thought put into this story. You have really convinced me to start on my own piece of writng about my dreams; I hope that I will be able to convey my feelings as well as you do.

@(:)

Nice fic, write more

Good story, i like it

good story i dont think it sucks at all

I really have to agree with *** about this...

Alright, Marron would never, ever, EVER, say anything like that to Pan. Do you want me to give you the whole "This-is-why-your-fics-must-be-AU" speech?

What's with all the OOC-ness?...

I'm pretty sure Pan wouldn't do that...

I liked it, but I agree with Daisy, Christina and Katie. It was a little rushed. Also, self insertion fics tend to not be very popular. Still, it was written pretty well. Is there going to be a sequel, or another work of yours posted soon? I hope so! )

Hello. Well, your story had a very good plot...but the fact was that you rushed it. And I don't understand why in the beginning it was all Trunks' fault. It really isn't his fault that he didn't know Pan liked him...it's actually her fault for not telling him. She can't really expect him to know what he's feeling...like they say, men are from mars...and women are from venus. This story and the romance parts are a little rushed. I know that everyone REALLY wants to see Trunks and Pan together...but I think you should be a little patient when writing it. It really does make the story seem more real and something that really would happen in someone's life. *well, aside from them being super human and all* But please don't take this as a flame. As a fellow author, I feel that it is my duty to help people. And like my English teacher says, "If you don't tell them what their mistakes are, you're really not helping them." Well, keep up the good work, and don't let me discourage you. If I am, then just forget my review. Ja ne!

uhhhh...good job, but I agree with daisy!

This started out pretty good. I don't like the fact that you made Pan out to be a pouty little girl with no life outside of Trunks, but it was well written, whcih made up for it. As I read the rest, however, I notice several factors that made this story decrease in quality. First, you put your name and your friends names into the story, and then created them to be stronger than the Z fighters. Meaning, you just wrote a Mary Sue, or a self-insertion fic. ( Not a good thing. Second, I actually read someone in your reviews say this is the best action fic they've ever read. Well... they must not read any action at all. Your "fight scene" was rushed, and I never got exactly why the villian was there, or why he was sudden;y attacking them. Also, the girls' attacks were lame, and unplanned. The third point is a little more of person preference, not of good or bad writing. You didn't put very much romance into it. You skipped over the entire reconsiliation scene between Trunks and Pan. That was probably a bad idea, considering they were who the story revolved around. You write pretty well. In fact, you write a lot better than most T&P authors I've seen, which is probably why I'm beginning to despise T&P fics. This particular work of yours was just too rushed, and the self-insertion always cheapens the affect. I hope to see another one of your works. But next time, be patient and more descriptive and PLEASE DO NOT WRITE ANOTHER MARY SUE!