I love, I love! great poem!

love,

wildfire

I likey, this is good I like how the seasons change! Cool keep adding more poems on here!

Hm. Has potential. Very well put together. But it didn't really ryhme all that much.

Ai Tennshi (AKA Butter),
I love this poem! Mrs. Fancher'd better read it to the class, because it's really cool! You'll have to teach me how to write more happier things.
See you Tuesday,
DDW

This poem is making me forget I am sitting in a dirty kitchen - it took me right out into the open air. Thank you!
I see the structure, with a repeated line; but perhaps a little more punctuation, like a semicolon or period after the first instance of the repeated line, would help the flow for the reader.