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| Aximilli2 2008-07-23 ch 2,  | abuseuh |
| Janika 2007-12-14 ch 10, | abuseAh, it looks like you preempted my suspicion concerning the birth rate of the Elemaki versus that of the Andalites. I suspect they're really the same species, kinda like Chinese and Germans. Definite differences but still humans. I don't think if she went thru a Sario Rip that the pod would be able to record how long she'd been in space b/c it's like a sudden jump. When they went back in time Ax's time-sense was put off, so I'm sure a mechanical instrument would also be affected. Which leads me to believe that it's not a Sario Rip she's encountered, but merely a small remnant of the Ellimist's power to enable her to reach Earth safely. |
| Inthe-EyesofMarch 2006-10-02 ch 10, | abuseMuahahahahaha!! I finished it! Good ending to a second part! ^__^ Though I have one thing to point out- I might get hated for it... With the caracter's opinnion in abstenence... I wouldn't think a person in her situation would think of an oppinion like that... Especially with her mother... It would help if you tried somehow to reinforce it- like she was inspired to follow it. It seemed to come out of the blue... O_o I know it's in your oppinion, but sometimes it destroys the flow of putting your oppinion in the chara. *stops rambling before bullets are flying...* One thing I can't wait to read about is when she meets her controller father and about Elfangor... *Laughs gleefully* |
| Inthe-EyesofMarch 2006-09-27 ch 7, | abuseI REALY need to be shot for not reading fast enough... T_T I thought this was an interesting chapter- and I must say before I forget, I really liked Solethi. His name and everything. I really wished you spent more time on this character, and with this chapter, more description of the camp. It felt rushed. I really love this fic- it feels originial, but with creatures that we grew up with and are familiar with, so it makes it all the better. :) |
| Inthe-EyesofMarch 2006-09-04 ch 5, | abuseHa. Slowly but surely, I make my way through. That made me really sad at how he went, and at how Maya reacted to all of it... You did a good job at making the elimist pop up at the worst time ever, like he always does. Why don't you write any original novels- you're really good at writing all of these... |
| Inthe-EyesofMarch 2006-08-15 ch 1, | abuseI've read a couple chapters of this... I like it a lot! ^_^ It reminds me of Rowanda for some reason. |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 10, | abuseWhew, what an awesome story! Aren't Sario Rips conveniant little things? I love how in a sense she's really lucky, but in another, she's kind of screwed. Either way, she's in for a rocky life! Well, I WAS going to update my website some more, but I think you've gotten me hooked! So.. it's on to Nadar PT II for me! |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 8, | abuse"Whenever something is too confusing, hold onto one truth, something that will never change. Ignore the rest." That's a very good truth, one that we could probably apply to life when it gets tough. Do you use that to get through tough situations? I think I probably will. Anyway, on to the next chapter. Regeneration is a lovely thing. |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 7, | abusedude, I so want a ring like that! And was the chick the ellimist? I'm under the impression she was, but.. Well, anyway, you've done a great job of making the Andalites into Hitlers. Awesome. And so many people glorify them! heehee! |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 6, | abuseNadars,what an interesting term. Already had a basic knowledge from putting your fanfiction on my website, but hmm.. interesting idea. Maybe William Wallace was a Nadar! =D |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 5, | abuse...I really need to learn not to speak too soon. But that'd probably be even harder for her. Human? Oi. But then again, the Andalites don't know much of them, heehee. Can't wait to see what happens, I'm super glad you've already finished this story! And now I want to know why the Ellimist is getting involved. Intriguing. =) |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 4, | abuse{Well, the mother is kind of old fashioned, so I guess she didn’t want to bother.} Wow, old fashioned andalites, huh? Never thought that was possible, but hey, I guess not every andalite is the same! More of what I like, the bittersweet stuff! Now she's forced to leave her brother.. I just hope he's okay! But that andalite definitely deserved it. I'm upset I didn't read these stories before, they're very emotion-inspiring! |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 3, | abuse"Yeah, the usual, just be tail-blade bags for your sons to practice on, just be half-breeds that your daughters can mock, just be slaves for your family because you are an Andalite and we are Elemaki." That line really stuck out to me for some reason. Struck a chord or something. I think that the USA needs to go over there and other countries that are for freedom and oppose oppression and give those guys a serious tongue-lashing. Gr. |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 2, | abuseUgh, that sucks! Scorned even by the Elemaki? These people are almost as bad as humans! Haha. Anyway.. I'm pretty sure you've fixed this in later fics, but start a new paragraph when new people speak. It's easier to read. ^_^ On to the next chappie.. |
| SmittenxKitten 2005-07-03 ch 1, | abuseAw, the poor things! Hi KP, I promised I'd read and here I am! Three years old and already vecols, hm? Not to mention losing their mom.. It makes me sad. =( As usual, I love your writing style. You really should expand on the Elemaki chronicles.. it'd make this reader happy. ^_^ |