I don't care what you people say. This is totally cool because you can imagine what it means. Duh. Nice work. I give it a solid 5/5

this is really good. it seems to run almost like an epic poem, telling a story, but it doesn't run on forever... it's a little confusing; some of the imagery is well-worded, but unclear. sometimes i don't know whether the speaker is good or bad, whether he/she is referring to good or bad/evil. however, that very last sentence is powerful, and i really like how it stands alone. :)
once again, a job well-done